for Octave1/10/2006 c1 breezy nostrils
i don't get the rhyming scheme? it's just the same word at the end of the line? anyway, it's interesting. keep on going!
i don't get the rhyming scheme? it's just the same word at the end of the line? anyway, it's interesting. keep on going!
9/1/2005 c1 
1k+Faithless Juliet
This is so writer-ish; we as writers understand vulnerablity, especially if we've been writing for a few years already. People are so scared to show themselves, we like to show lies instead of truth, especially new writers they don't understand that writing is all about vulnerablity; no body can relate to how good you might or might not feel, we all want to know what hurts each other the most.
Juliet.
1k+Faithless JulietThis is so writer-ish; we as writers understand vulnerablity, especially if we've been writing for a few years already. People are so scared to show themselves, we like to show lies instead of truth, especially new writers they don't understand that writing is all about vulnerablity; no body can relate to how good you might or might not feel, we all want to know what hurts each other the most.
Juliet.
8/17/2005 c1 58White Tea and Ginger
Oh..I really love this. Cool concept. I can really really relate to every word in this poem. I really liked this line: 'And you write down, knelt down what's burning you most;'. Perfect. Love it.
58White Tea and GingerOh..I really love this. Cool concept. I can really really relate to every word in this poem. I really liked this line: 'And you write down, knelt down what's burning you most;'. Perfect. Love it.
7/28/2005 c1 18Duck8
Wow me like me like! i love the imagery and the use of language it doesn't quite rhyme as such in places but it's still really really good. Go u :)
18Duck8Wow me like me like! i love the imagery and the use of language it doesn't quite rhyme as such in places but it's still really really good. Go u :)
7/27/2005 c1 104FunkyFlower
unusual, but an awesome poem. great imagery and some fantastic lines. good luck!:-)
104FunkyFlowerunusual, but an awesome poem. great imagery and some fantastic lines. good luck!:-)
7/27/2005 c1 26Elizabeth Ebony
wow-the imagery is amazing here...i wrote a sequel to that poem you reviewed could you read it please,tell me what you think?
i love the line about the abstract polar musings...this is going in my favourites list.:)
E~Ebony.
26Elizabeth Ebonywow-the imagery is amazing here...i wrote a sequel to that poem you reviewed could you read it please,tell me what you think?
i love the line about the abstract polar musings...this is going in my favourites list.:)
E~Ebony.
7/26/2005 c1 20Pheobe Meryll
Oh, I like it. Exactly the description of what happens to me when I write...I actually write poetry rarely because it really bares all, and in a story I feel far less vulnerable. :)
This will be added to my favorites list...good job!
20Pheobe MeryllOh, I like it. Exactly the description of what happens to me when I write...I actually write poetry rarely because it really bares all, and in a story I feel far less vulnerable. :)
This will be added to my favorites list...good job!
7/25/2005 c1 6Nobody-n-Particular
It seems you didn't really rhyme much except repeat the same end words although the "refusing" with "musings" worked well and the "now" with "down" was subtle. However the other "rhymes" were of the same words like "over" with "over." That isn't quite rhyming. Regardless of that, I love the imagery and the "abstract, polar musings."
6Nobody-n-ParticularIt seems you didn't really rhyme much except repeat the same end words although the "refusing" with "musings" worked well and the "now" with "down" was subtle. However the other "rhymes" were of the same words like "over" with "over." That isn't quite rhyming. Regardless of that, I love the imagery and the "abstract, polar musings."