8/2/2005 c1 10E.V. Delacy
Well, I like. It was very well written and it had that certain depth that just draws you in to want to read it. Very good!
Well, I like. It was very well written and it had that certain depth that just draws you in to want to read it. Very good!
7/29/2005 c1 Ballerina
Oh my God...this was beautiful. Seriously. The last stanza was incredible - it was the one that really got to me, hook, line and sinker.
Oh my God...this was beautiful. Seriously. The last stanza was incredible - it was the one that really got to me, hook, line and sinker.
7/28/2005 c1 Celyn
It's good; I'll have to direct some of my more pessimistic friends your way...
I'll agree that "thus" seems a bit odd, though.
It's good; I'll have to direct some of my more pessimistic friends your way...
I'll agree that "thus" seems a bit odd, though.
7/27/2005 c1 Pessimistic Friend
Thanks Eyetk! Well... I'm not really THAT pessimistic, I just sigh a lot... Check out my MSN Space for the responding poem please! (Warning: it may not be as good as yours)
By the way, your view on destruction is frequently echoed in the worship of destruction in many religions...
Thanks Eyetk! Well... I'm not really THAT pessimistic, I just sigh a lot... Check out my MSN Space for the responding poem please! (Warning: it may not be as good as yours)
By the way, your view on destruction is frequently echoed in the worship of destruction in many religions...
7/27/2005 c1 83Prevaricate
I know people like this. They annoy me. You've portrayed it well; the rhyming doesn't seemed forced, and it could have, easily. Good job on that. Only complaint: "thus" in the last stanza seems a bit misplaced. Too formal for the rest of the poem. Replacing it with a more common word ("so", perhaps) might improve the flow.
Nice job.
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I know people like this. They annoy me. You've portrayed it well; the rhyming doesn't seemed forced, and it could have, easily. Good job on that. Only complaint: "thus" in the last stanza seems a bit misplaced. Too formal for the rest of the poem. Replacing it with a more common word ("so", perhaps) might improve the flow.
Nice job.
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