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8/2/2005 c1 10E.V. Delacy
Well, I like. It was very well written and it had that certain depth that just draws you in to want to read it. Very good!
7/29/2005 c1 Ballerina
Oh my God...this was beautiful. Seriously. The last stanza was incredible - it was the one that really got to me, hook, line and sinker.
7/28/2005 c1 Celyn
It's good; I'll have to direct some of my more pessimistic friends your way...

I'll agree that "thus" seems a bit odd, though.
7/27/2005 c1 18Aithwayth
very well written. i love it. kudos!
7/27/2005 c1 Pessimistic Friend
Thanks Eyetk! Well... I'm not really THAT pessimistic, I just sigh a lot... Check out my MSN Space for the responding poem please! (Warning: it may not be as good as yours)

By the way, your view on destruction is frequently echoed in the worship of destruction in many religions...
7/27/2005 c1 83Prevaricate
I know people like this. They annoy me. You've portrayed it well; the rhyming doesn't seemed forced, and it could have, easily. Good job on that. Only complaint: "thus" in the last stanza seems a bit misplaced. Too formal for the rest of the poem. Replacing it with a more common word ("so", perhaps) might improve the flow.

Nice job.

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