for Battle6/30/2006 c1 
15Meahow
How strange. the end is a slight twist, foreshadowed by that little bit in the beginning...and then you look back from the vantage point of the end of the story and see that yes, it all could be a metaphor. if anything, i think the first fight paragraph could be a little more descriptive, a little more...there. for lack of a better word. wow...what a strange concept. i love strange concepts. yay!
15MeahowHow strange. the end is a slight twist, foreshadowed by that little bit in the beginning...and then you look back from the vantage point of the end of the story and see that yes, it all could be a metaphor. if anything, i think the first fight paragraph could be a little more descriptive, a little more...there. for lack of a better word. wow...what a strange concept. i love strange concepts. yay!
6/21/2006 c1 15Rutoh-Chan
Nice, I like the symbolism. Very interesting. Short but concise. excelent job.
15Rutoh-ChanNice, I like the symbolism. Very interesting. Short but concise. excelent job.
12/24/2005 c1 Eloquent-Marionette
A little gruesome but not nearly as bad as some other people's I've read. but, anywho, actually, the description was really good here(though gruesome as it may be) haha, I really can't understand why I'm making such a big deal about it anyway, but, ahem, so, good job on this and keep writing! (don't mind me, I'm insane. Even I can't understand me half the time)
Rock on, peace out, and Keep writing,~Davida
A little gruesome but not nearly as bad as some other people's I've read. but, anywho, actually, the description was really good here(though gruesome as it may be) haha, I really can't understand why I'm making such a big deal about it anyway, but, ahem, so, good job on this and keep writing! (don't mind me, I'm insane. Even I can't understand me half the time)
Rock on, peace out, and Keep writing,~Davida
8/7/2005 c1 16Bobertkins
Wow! Great story! That was probably the best one shot I have read! I really liked how you described the war as between two animals. It was a great aligory! The only thing I can say to help is in the first Paragraph you started alot of the sentences off with The. It makes the story kinda stale sometimes. Other than that supperb story! I really liked it! It is going on my favorite stoy list! :)
16BobertkinsWow! Great story! That was probably the best one shot I have read! I really liked how you described the war as between two animals. It was a great aligory! The only thing I can say to help is in the first Paragraph you started alot of the sentences off with The. It makes the story kinda stale sometimes. Other than that supperb story! I really liked it! It is going on my favorite stoy list! :)
8/5/2005 c1 19Rhea Valente
Oh wow! That was really cool! Its so clever how you had the animals n the men fighting n how it all intertwined! It was really well done! i LOVED it! Great work! Really liked it! ^_^
19Rhea ValenteOh wow! That was really cool! Its so clever how you had the animals n the men fighting n how it all intertwined! It was really well done! i LOVED it! Great work! Really liked it! ^_^