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8/1/2005 c1 28catfish-head
hrm. interesting. I know what you mean on the think to much bit. those brains are dangerous. they'll get you into trouble. I should know.but on the the review.I think it might flow better if you took 'I' off of the front of line 2nd ,3rd and 4th. or atleast the 2nd and 4th line. and the only other thing is, when you say your life belongs to them now, are you speaking as a parent?I suppose thats what it is. its nice, most poems on this site are from the point of view of a moody, whiney teenager. its nice to hear something from a mature stance.
8/1/2005 c1 arhhh
im confused

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