for Grey Heart8/31/2006 c1 FFNeko
O... Yay, blood and gore!
I like the details... Sometimes I get too hyper to sit for a long time so I don't really have a long attention span, so I don't think I write good details but I really like your prologue *stops to breath*
I think this will be a really cool story.
Keep it up, cha!
(I ate too much sugar today :3)
~FFNeko
O... Yay, blood and gore!
I like the details... Sometimes I get too hyper to sit for a long time so I don't really have a long attention span, so I don't think I write good details but I really like your prologue *stops to breath*
I think this will be a really cool story.
Keep it up, cha!
(I ate too much sugar today :3)
~FFNeko
8/2/2005 c1 Mintelwerke
Your style is very simple and effective. I like that. Just one mistake:
-So whose fate shall you seal, you’re precious world or me?-
In that line, it's ''your'' not ''you're.'' Other than that, it's perfect. It's intriguing. Very interesting, but you didn't give away much. I can't wait to see what happens next.
Your style is very simple and effective. I like that. Just one mistake:
-So whose fate shall you seal, you’re precious world or me?-
In that line, it's ''your'' not ''you're.'' Other than that, it's perfect. It's intriguing. Very interesting, but you didn't give away much. I can't wait to see what happens next.