for I Saw God Once3/3/2006 c1 
24Sarah-Brighteyes
Bravo. Bravo. I found this one of the best pieces I have read in a very long time, and I read alot on here. It tis my form of relaxation.
I loved the stanzas and the overall tone of this... the subject was something that makes everyone think about their own faith or lack of it, whichever.
I love the lines, "Wondering why I am talking to a statuette all painted and glossyThe figure more plastic than the boys in the fraternity," For some reason that just stuck out at me. Something flashy and un-real, is that really god?
beautiful. I really think others should read this. Its a great thinking piece and not corny spirituality just drabbled on paper. It seems well thought-out and well great imagery and it totally caught my eye.
Bravo. keep up the fabulous writing.
24Sarah-BrighteyesBravo. Bravo. I found this one of the best pieces I have read in a very long time, and I read alot on here. It tis my form of relaxation.
I loved the stanzas and the overall tone of this... the subject was something that makes everyone think about their own faith or lack of it, whichever.
I love the lines, "Wondering why I am talking to a statuette all painted and glossyThe figure more plastic than the boys in the fraternity," For some reason that just stuck out at me. Something flashy and un-real, is that really god?
beautiful. I really think others should read this. Its a great thinking piece and not corny spirituality just drabbled on paper. It seems well thought-out and well great imagery and it totally caught my eye.
Bravo. keep up the fabulous writing.
2/14/2006 c1 99cygnus olor
so touching... i like the dramatic effect... especially since so few could write for the Lord :)
pinoy ka, right? tnx for the review :)
keep on writing! :D
* ner *
99cygnus olorso touching... i like the dramatic effect... especially since so few could write for the Lord :)
pinoy ka, right? tnx for the review :)
keep on writing! :D
* ner *
12/16/2005 c1 37philod
Everything thing about this poem I could name little less than perfection. Well done!
37philodEverything thing about this poem I could name little less than perfection. Well done!
12/4/2005 c1 17sunday night sky
i dont normally like religious poems because they always seem to preach, but this was great! the last stanza is the best. the message is great too! nice work.
17sunday night skyi dont normally like religious poems because they always seem to preach, but this was great! the last stanza is the best. the message is great too! nice work.
11/24/2005 c1 9The Gobbler
Whoa. That was amazing. The rhyming was really clever, and the yearning... that was so powerful. I could definitely feel it, definitely relate. Great job.
9The GobblerWhoa. That was amazing. The rhyming was really clever, and the yearning... that was so powerful. I could definitely feel it, definitely relate. Great job.
11/15/2005 c1 141AllyCred
i like it, the words are simple as well as the imagery, but they really speak to me "My reflection breaking with a tear" i love that line, i just really love this piece its beautiful.
Lots of love~AC~
141AllyCredi like it, the words are simple as well as the imagery, but they really speak to me "My reflection breaking with a tear" i love that line, i just really love this piece its beautiful.
Lots of love~AC~
9/22/2005 c1 43NinjaStoryteller
This is very deep in a way that most people don't put much thought into. It takes a great mind to point out something like that and paint it into life. Random thought, but I bet you'd like Death Cab For Cutie.
43NinjaStorytellerThis is very deep in a way that most people don't put much thought into. It takes a great mind to point out something like that and paint it into life. Random thought, but I bet you'd like Death Cab For Cutie.
9/20/2005 c1 39Moppish
I really liked this poem. It reminded me of my own opinions of God. I particularly liked the way you rhymed things. At first you had no rhymes, and then you had a few, and then you had them consistently. The places you "saw" god were truly beautiful.The Quakers believe that God is in every person; therefore there is good in every person. Seeing the goodness in these people and things allowed you to see God, I guess. I'm not deeply religious at all, but that's what I think.
39MoppishI really liked this poem. It reminded me of my own opinions of God. I particularly liked the way you rhymed things. At first you had no rhymes, and then you had a few, and then you had them consistently. The places you "saw" god were truly beautiful.The Quakers believe that God is in every person; therefore there is good in every person. Seeing the goodness in these people and things allowed you to see God, I guess. I'm not deeply religious at all, but that's what I think.
9/20/2005 c1 13Shasta Valentine
your quite a doubtful person i can tell. have faith my dear you only make christians like me happier we're saved.if you would have changed the central message I would have liked it more.
-Shasta Valentine
13Shasta Valentineyour quite a doubtful person i can tell. have faith my dear you only make christians like me happier we're saved.if you would have changed the central message I would have liked it more.
-Shasta Valentine
9/16/2005 c1 Spisovatel
It's a good message. Not only that, but it's nice to see a poem that actually rhymes for a change.
It's a good message. Not only that, but it's nice to see a poem that actually rhymes for a change.
9/4/2005 c1 70Maisha Mafuriko
..this writing takes me back in time to when it was a cashier I was and one of the Town's beggars as it were came in with clothes tattered... hair to the middle of his back with a beard full... He wanted for an enamel drinking cup..it was on sale and then there were a few coins in a cup that others leave their spare change in so with these coins and the few he had ...well he purchased the cup...and then he pulled from his pocket... the smallest of silver crosses, why it could have fit atop a pencil on the earser end... Somhow a greater Presence passed me by that day in passing...
70Maisha Mafuriko..this writing takes me back in time to when it was a cashier I was and one of the Town's beggars as it were came in with clothes tattered... hair to the middle of his back with a beard full... He wanted for an enamel drinking cup..it was on sale and then there were a few coins in a cup that others leave their spare change in so with these coins and the few he had ...well he purchased the cup...and then he pulled from his pocket... the smallest of silver crosses, why it could have fit atop a pencil on the earser end... Somhow a greater Presence passed me by that day in passing...
9/3/2005 c1 26writejoy
I loved the way you wrote this poem. And yeah, the fact that God always comes through at the end is so encouraging and just plain incredible. Thanks for the poem and your reviews too
26writejoyI loved the way you wrote this poem. And yeah, the fact that God always comes through at the end is so encouraging and just plain incredible. Thanks for the poem and your reviews too
9/2/2005 c1 reluctant writer
I could relate to this. Good job with the rhyming. Liked the alliteration.
I could relate to this. Good job with the rhyming. Liked the alliteration.