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10/24/2005 c1 56whatsapenname
that was really really good. couple suggestions. a world with no tainted stain is a little awkward and kind of throws of the rhythm of the refrain, consider revising it. also the questions toward the end are better left unanswered in my opinion. on second thought, leave in the no take out the yes, the no is a necessary transition. anyways that about it except proofread, couple spelling things, nothing big. otherwise fantabulous. do me a favor and read my new one blue october please. fanks.

~whatsa~
8/6/2005 c1 70Aryanda
wow. this is brilliant! i loved the word choice, and it rhymed, and it really got through to me. wow. there are not enough words to describe what i felt reading it.

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