for An Angel Face is Smiling working title10/24/2005 c1 
56whatsapenname
that was really really good. couple suggestions. a world with no tainted stain is a little awkward and kind of throws of the rhythm of the refrain, consider revising it. also the questions toward the end are better left unanswered in my opinion. on second thought, leave in the no take out the yes, the no is a necessary transition. anyways that about it except proofread, couple spelling things, nothing big. otherwise fantabulous. do me a favor and read my new one blue october please. fanks.
~whatsa~
56whatsapennamethat was really really good. couple suggestions. a world with no tainted stain is a little awkward and kind of throws of the rhythm of the refrain, consider revising it. also the questions toward the end are better left unanswered in my opinion. on second thought, leave in the no take out the yes, the no is a necessary transition. anyways that about it except proofread, couple spelling things, nothing big. otherwise fantabulous. do me a favor and read my new one blue october please. fanks.
~whatsa~