for Rain Swayed3/19/2006 c1 
6McQuinn
Beautiful and funny, but the tense-change made it seem a little awkward. It's still 5-7-5 if you changed "are" to "were."
-McQuinn
6McQuinnBeautiful and funny, but the tense-change made it seem a little awkward. It's still 5-7-5 if you changed "are" to "were."
-McQuinn
3/3/2006 c1 24Sarah-Brighteyes
I think I almost laughed when i read this haiku. I freaking love haikus, they say so much in so little time.
This was great actually. I found it humourous for some reaon... you ever find yourself nervously laughing? maybe that was what it was, but anywho...that was sort of the smile on my face. Weird maybe, but then again thats what happens when we expect something to change or maybe feel different when we havent felt it in so long and... well you still get "wet".
And I know I babble in my reveiws lol so sorry, but fabulous write. Dont stop. Its nice. Bravo.
24Sarah-BrighteyesI think I almost laughed when i read this haiku. I freaking love haikus, they say so much in so little time.
This was great actually. I found it humourous for some reaon... you ever find yourself nervously laughing? maybe that was what it was, but anywho...that was sort of the smile on my face. Weird maybe, but then again thats what happens when we expect something to change or maybe feel different when we havent felt it in so long and... well you still get "wet".
And I know I babble in my reveiws lol so sorry, but fabulous write. Dont stop. Its nice. Bravo.
12/4/2005 c1 17sunday night sky
lovely haiku, really nice. also - i checked out one of ur your fave poems, the one written by tupac shakur, cos i hadnt heard of him writing poems before - and it was great, so thanks for that! :D
17sunday night skylovely haiku, really nice. also - i checked out one of ur your fave poems, the one written by tupac shakur, cos i hadnt heard of him writing poems before - and it was great, so thanks for that! :D
11/12/2005 c1 34Smoky Bear
lovely haiku... it is eloquent and emphatic. the metaphor is beautiful, keep writing.
thanx for the review, but i'm sorry?... did i hear you say drugs dull the senses? i'm laughing so hard you can probably hear me. -you might care to notice some of the quotes you have on your bio are from people really high on drugs-
if you want to discuss, fine. don't email me telling me to get off drugs tho' because i am not 'on' them.
34Smoky Bearlovely haiku... it is eloquent and emphatic. the metaphor is beautiful, keep writing.
thanx for the review, but i'm sorry?... did i hear you say drugs dull the senses? i'm laughing so hard you can probably hear me. -you might care to notice some of the quotes you have on your bio are from people really high on drugs-
if you want to discuss, fine. don't email me telling me to get off drugs tho' because i am not 'on' them.
10/16/2005 c1 63silentscreamer07
i absolutely loved this poem! You have no idea! It was great! I would add it to my favs. but ive got a feeling that ive reached my max. ne ways. awesome haiku. *kw* i read ur other stuff and you really got a talent for writing. so keep it up. thnx for the review. and i loved this.
~brit
63silentscreamer07i absolutely loved this poem! You have no idea! It was great! I would add it to my favs. but ive got a feeling that ive reached my max. ne ways. awesome haiku. *kw* i read ur other stuff and you really got a talent for writing. so keep it up. thnx for the review. and i loved this.
~brit
9/30/2005 c1 13Shasta Valentine
i like your pen name. nicely done :D now i want it to rain...perfect haiku time. haha and angst poem time. spread the angst.
-ShAzZ
13Shasta Valentinei like your pen name. nicely done :D now i want it to rain...perfect haiku time. haha and angst poem time. spread the angst.
-ShAzZ
9/28/2005 c1 20Pheobe Meryll
Haha. I took this in an allegeorical sense, is that okay? Either way it's brilliant. You have some talant.
20Pheobe MeryllHaha. I took this in an allegeorical sense, is that okay? Either way it's brilliant. You have some talant.
9/22/2005 c1 43NinjaStoryteller
This is one of the best haikus I've ever seen. Just a handful of words, and it conjures up some pretty explicit memories of having no one to spend my freetime with for the past month.
43NinjaStorytellerThis is one of the best haikus I've ever seen. Just a handful of words, and it conjures up some pretty explicit memories of having no one to spend my freetime with for the past month.
9/17/2005 c1 118Lady Glass
That made me laugh. I've done things like that, only I report back to my mom when she asks me if it's still raining, I'll step outside, get wet, and go, "Yup, it's still raining. I know 'cause I got real wet out there..."
Haha!
Much love,
Lady Glass
118Lady GlassThat made me laugh. I've done things like that, only I report back to my mom when she asks me if it's still raining, I'll step outside, get wet, and go, "Yup, it's still raining. I know 'cause I got real wet out there..."
Haha!
Much love,
Lady Glass