for Gunshot Lullaby11/22/2008 c1 meduse
this is probably my favorite poem by you.
i wish i could write like this, but unfortunately, i probably never will
anyways, an awesomely amazing job on an fantastic poem.'
~DixieAusten
this is probably my favorite poem by you.
i wish i could write like this, but unfortunately, i probably never will
anyways, an awesomely amazing job on an fantastic poem.'
~DixieAusten
4/27/2007 c1 
1yookahrr
Society. it just screams out society.
Well, everything is about society these days.
great imagery.
everything is a little fucked up.
xxo
1yookahrrSociety. it just screams out society.
Well, everything is about society these days.
great imagery.
everything is a little fucked up.
xxo
11/10/2006 c1 8Autumn's Last Curse
It's good. I don't see why you say it isn't. You have a way with creating an atmosphere... And with creating a world in which you can immerse yourself as many times as you wish to and always come out with something different.
8Autumn's Last CurseIt's good. I don't see why you say it isn't. You have a way with creating an atmosphere... And with creating a world in which you can immerse yourself as many times as you wish to and always come out with something different.
7/17/2006 c1 63Affinity
This is excellent. A shame you have discontinued your profile.. I would love to see more.
- Thanks for the review -
63AffinityThis is excellent. A shame you have discontinued your profile.. I would love to see more.
- Thanks for the review -
6/25/2006 c1 14arethesemyfeet
Razors and knives collect teenage livesi really loved this line for some reason
Little black sheep of the flock turns awayAnd he's shunned by society for the rest of his daysand these lines are so true to life
i really liked this and it was well done
14arethesemyfeetRazors and knives collect teenage livesi really loved this line for some reason
Little black sheep of the flock turns awayAnd he's shunned by society for the rest of his daysand these lines are so true to life
i really liked this and it was well done
11/6/2005 c1 27why can't I just be tall
Wow. These lyrics are fantastic, dark and yet beautiful. So, so sad though. Anyway beautiful work I hope that you keep writing and one last thing what type of music does this go to?
27why can't I just be tallWow. These lyrics are fantastic, dark and yet beautiful. So, so sad though. Anyway beautiful work I hope that you keep writing and one last thing what type of music does this go to?
10/11/2005 c1 871no.peace.los.angeles
So I like this, but I don't know if I completely understood everything. Some things seemed a little obscure for me to get, but hey, I don't know everything. I got the general idea of it, and it was definitely original. I liked.
871no.peace.los.angelesSo I like this, but I don't know if I completely understood everything. Some things seemed a little obscure for me to get, but hey, I don't know everything. I got the general idea of it, and it was definitely original. I liked.
8/20/2005 c1 7Rhyet The Dark Angel
lol...once again you have to put up with my shit-original reveiws! HA! I liked it..it was very descriptive and it kept me reading
7Rhyet The Dark Angellol...once again you have to put up with my shit-original reveiws! HA! I liked it..it was very descriptive and it kept me reading
8/15/2005 c1 15Starlight Socrates
Hello again. You've changed your account a lot; I wasn't sure I had the right one until I saw your email. Speaking of which, I'll send you a message as soon as mine is working again.
I always repeat myself in reviews to you: well done, very real, keep writing. What more is there to life? Good job.
15Starlight SocratesHello again. You've changed your account a lot; I wasn't sure I had the right one until I saw your email. Speaking of which, I'll send you a message as soon as mine is working again.
I always repeat myself in reviews to you: well done, very real, keep writing. What more is there to life? Good job.
8/13/2005 c1 28Half Light Lingers
Healthily original, especially for something dealing with this sort of subject matter. Clearly stated, simply evocative, and the lack of a general rhyme scheme (save for in the refrain) seems to give me the impression of that whole 'non-conformity' theme. Then, the rhyme must work /very/ well in the refrain- parents being the embodiment of conformity itself. Hm. Interesting.
28Half Light LingersHealthily original, especially for something dealing with this sort of subject matter. Clearly stated, simply evocative, and the lack of a general rhyme scheme (save for in the refrain) seems to give me the impression of that whole 'non-conformity' theme. Then, the rhyme must work /very/ well in the refrain- parents being the embodiment of conformity itself. Hm. Interesting.
8/10/2005 c1 addie pray
This was fucking beautiful. I read it while listening to Nine Inch Nails, "Dead Souls" and it really fit well. The descriptions and the strange way this flowed were awesome. Gunshot lullaby. Yeah, I keep on reading this and it's just fantastic. Favourites list.
This was fucking beautiful. I read it while listening to Nine Inch Nails, "Dead Souls" and it really fit well. The descriptions and the strange way this flowed were awesome. Gunshot lullaby. Yeah, I keep on reading this and it's just fantastic. Favourites list.
8/10/2005 c1 29Katterree Fengari
very nice. Not all the description is clear and it needs punctuation to be filled in.
The repitition works well, and you have some very strong imagery phrases. I like the whole stanza that starts "Quiet piano and electric guitars..." best.
29Katterree Fengarivery nice. Not all the description is clear and it needs punctuation to be filled in.
The repitition works well, and you have some very strong imagery phrases. I like the whole stanza that starts "Quiet piano and electric guitars..." best.
8/9/2005 c1 8hamx
This was great, I would love to hear it. I especially like the lines "Razors and knives collect teenage lives/Like the executives collect cash and spill lies". Wonderfully done. I also liked your other poem. The imagery was great.
Thank you for the review. I didn't think that poem was all that great because I wrote it in about 2 minutes, but hell, no one likes their work haha.
8hamxThis was great, I would love to hear it. I especially like the lines "Razors and knives collect teenage lives/Like the executives collect cash and spill lies". Wonderfully done. I also liked your other poem. The imagery was great.
Thank you for the review. I didn't think that poem was all that great because I wrote it in about 2 minutes, but hell, no one likes their work haha.
8/9/2005 c1 4XxSaVeMeFrOmMyNiGhTmArExX
I like it. It's sort of Angsty, but I'm in the mood for angst. Thanks for reviewing.
XxSaVeMexX
4XxSaVeMeFrOmMyNiGhTmArExXI like it. It's sort of Angsty, but I'm in the mood for angst. Thanks for reviewing.
XxSaVeMexX