for Eternity's Kiss1/20/2007 c1 Tina Mahan
I was completely entranced by the first sentence. Also using the Lord Byron quote was a very nice touch!
I was completely entranced by the first sentence. Also using the Lord Byron quote was a very nice touch!
7/15/2006 c12 
9Alteng
Hope is going to be very upset when she sees her sister's new dental work!
I like you description that Anne is feeling upon waking. Wait until she finds out what she is! This is going to be a messy next chapter!
9AltengHope is going to be very upset when she sees her sister's new dental work!
I like you description that Anne is feeling upon waking. Wait until she finds out what she is! This is going to be a messy next chapter!
7/9/2006 c12 26Scooz
Awesome, more cliffhangers but awesome. I haven't been on in awhile so I had to reread the last chapter to get this one. I am thinking Alris' betrayal is linked to Grant, not sure how yet, so I'll wait for the next few chapters.
Now, I find the last line from Anna's p.o.v very curious. " A blinding flash of white light exploded behind Anna’s eyes." I suspect that this might have something to do with Anna's turning, or if I am missing something all together.
Either way, nice chapter, I am hoping the next one will shed a little bit more light on the mystery that is Hope and her mother's ring. Um, I am hoping to post the next PTC chapter soon. I have four pages so far and I am hoping to get three or four more before I post. Sorry it's taking so long.
26ScoozAwesome, more cliffhangers but awesome. I haven't been on in awhile so I had to reread the last chapter to get this one. I am thinking Alris' betrayal is linked to Grant, not sure how yet, so I'll wait for the next few chapters.
Now, I find the last line from Anna's p.o.v very curious. " A blinding flash of white light exploded behind Anna’s eyes." I suspect that this might have something to do with Anna's turning, or if I am missing something all together.
Either way, nice chapter, I am hoping the next one will shed a little bit more light on the mystery that is Hope and her mother's ring. Um, I am hoping to post the next PTC chapter soon. I have four pages so far and I am hoping to get three or four more before I post. Sorry it's taking so long.
6/4/2006 c11 Scooz
Oh, bit of a cliffhanger you left behind. I found two small spelling errors:
"Hope could draw heir power far from Silvenford..."
I am guessing you meant 'her'.
“You’ve only won your won destruction.”
The second 'won' should be 'own'.
Anyway, great chapter. A few titbits were revealed. Alris' betrayal, Grant's immortality, some of Eric's past, and more hints as to Hope's ancient lineage. And of course, you left us all hanging on the sword fight :P Saw that you put up some new stories. I'll take a peek at them later when I get the chance. Update this story soon. I wanna know if Eric kicks Grant's ass ^^
Oh, bit of a cliffhanger you left behind. I found two small spelling errors:
"Hope could draw heir power far from Silvenford..."
I am guessing you meant 'her'.
“You’ve only won your won destruction.”
The second 'won' should be 'own'.
Anyway, great chapter. A few titbits were revealed. Alris' betrayal, Grant's immortality, some of Eric's past, and more hints as to Hope's ancient lineage. And of course, you left us all hanging on the sword fight :P Saw that you put up some new stories. I'll take a peek at them later when I get the chance. Update this story soon. I wanna know if Eric kicks Grant's ass ^^
5/11/2006 c11 9Alteng
The quote at the beginning is indeed intriguing. I might have to look that one up. Certain things hit a person that way.
Oh my, is Anna going to be getting a bit long in the tooth? Boy! Hope will be very upset with that one. And if Silvenford has drank of her, is she not the same blood as Hope, and what Alris is planning with Hope's blood to defeat him will just put them at a standstill again. Messy, messy! Of course, Eric is trying to gain the blood on a willing way, and I do think that Eric is kind of growing on Hope, fangs and all!
9AltengThe quote at the beginning is indeed intriguing. I might have to look that one up. Certain things hit a person that way.
Oh my, is Anna going to be getting a bit long in the tooth? Boy! Hope will be very upset with that one. And if Silvenford has drank of her, is she not the same blood as Hope, and what Alris is planning with Hope's blood to defeat him will just put them at a standstill again. Messy, messy! Of course, Eric is trying to gain the blood on a willing way, and I do think that Eric is kind of growing on Hope, fangs and all!
4/29/2006 c11 19Lara Bykirk
Exciting chapter... The romance between Eric and Hope seems a little too swift, however. Hope has only seen Eric a few times, and already she realizes that she's in love and is trying to fight against it? On the other hand, I'm very excited to see what will come of this duel, which on the surface is useless.
19Lara BykirkExciting chapter... The romance between Eric and Hope seems a little too swift, however. Hope has only seen Eric a few times, and already she realizes that she's in love and is trying to fight against it? On the other hand, I'm very excited to see what will come of this duel, which on the surface is useless.
1/22/2006 c10 17Without A Muse
The entire story if very good. Each chapter leads you on so a person wants to read the next one. I also like how you put different poems or paragraphs and such at the top of the chapter to go along with it. A nice touch. I also liked how you don't reveal too much about the characters. YOu let it out bit by bit. I can't wait to read the rest of it.
17Without A MuseThe entire story if very good. Each chapter leads you on so a person wants to read the next one. I also like how you put different poems or paragraphs and such at the top of the chapter to go along with it. A nice touch. I also liked how you don't reveal too much about the characters. YOu let it out bit by bit. I can't wait to read the rest of it.
1/20/2006 c10 50fallenblackangel
Hey! This ones great! I've been following this story for a while - I'd like to see how it ends! Keep up the good work!
50fallenblackangelHey! This ones great! I've been following this story for a while - I'd like to see how it ends! Keep up the good work!
1/11/2006 c1 7gingerbeer
Hey, great idea! Just a typing error in the poem up at the top.
I love how this first chapter leaves me hanging, needing to know more about "I had another purpose."
7gingerbeerHey, great idea! Just a typing error in the poem up at the top.
I love how this first chapter leaves me hanging, needing to know more about "I had another purpose."
1/6/2006 c10 9Alteng
Actually, this is a good time for me and vampire stories, because I have been working on Travellers . . . it is on Fanfiction right now. I am on vacation and hope to type up a couple of chapters more before I give up on it.
Well, anyway, that was an exciting little chapter. I would have been a bit disappointed if Silvenford hadn't taken up the opportunity to kidnap Anna. She kind of walked right into it.
Ah, and the bit with Alris and Eric. Hey, a vampire must know about the happenings to their prey.
9AltengActually, this is a good time for me and vampire stories, because I have been working on Travellers . . . it is on Fanfiction right now. I am on vacation and hope to type up a couple of chapters more before I give up on it.
Well, anyway, that was an exciting little chapter. I would have been a bit disappointed if Silvenford hadn't taken up the opportunity to kidnap Anna. She kind of walked right into it.
Ah, and the bit with Alris and Eric. Hey, a vampire must know about the happenings to their prey.
1/3/2006 c10 26Scooz
Awe, poor Anna. I didn't like Silvenford much to begin with, but now he has given me enough reason to hate him. Well things are progressing, Hope is aware of Eric's dark secret even if she is not sure what it is, Eric seems ready to admit his feelings for Hope (or atleast I hope he does), and hopefully, since Hope's mission to save her sister seems to fit in with Alris' plan to stop Sivlenford, one can only hope everything works out in the end. This chapter is a nice turning point as was the last, things are in motion now and I can't wait to see how it all ends. Update soon.
I only found one small mistake:“Well, what are we gong to do?” I'm pretty sure you meany going there.
26ScoozAwe, poor Anna. I didn't like Silvenford much to begin with, but now he has given me enough reason to hate him. Well things are progressing, Hope is aware of Eric's dark secret even if she is not sure what it is, Eric seems ready to admit his feelings for Hope (or atleast I hope he does), and hopefully, since Hope's mission to save her sister seems to fit in with Alris' plan to stop Sivlenford, one can only hope everything works out in the end. This chapter is a nice turning point as was the last, things are in motion now and I can't wait to see how it all ends. Update soon.
I only found one small mistake:“Well, what are we gong to do?” I'm pretty sure you meany going there.
1/3/2006 c10 19Lara Bykirk
Interesting chapter. I'd really like to know more about Alris. She is a very intriguing character; I get the sense that she knows a lot more than she's telling.
19Lara BykirkInteresting chapter. I'd really like to know more about Alris. She is a very intriguing character; I get the sense that she knows a lot more than she's telling.
12/17/2005 c9 5Ciao.Bella.Soldato
Ooh... things are really getting interesting now! Keep it up!
~Phoenix
5Ciao.Bella.SoldatoOoh... things are really getting interesting now! Keep it up!
~Phoenix
11/25/2005 c9 26Scooz
Quick corrections:"He stoked Hope’s cool hand, gently and silently"I think you meant 'stroked'.
"And Hope’s eyes remained closed; her chocolate hair spread in a cloud behind her head, waxen complexion and slowed breathing giving her the look of one sleeping fairy tale princess under an evil curse."Just a suggestion because the sentence kind of sounds wierd: 'And Hope's eyes remained closed. Her chocolate hair spread in a cloud behind her head, waxen complexion, and slowed breathing gave her the look of...'
"her way to right grant’s teetering scales"grant's needs to be capitalized.
"he nodded, and all was aright."I think you meant 'alright'.
"Hope felt her eyelids flutter open before she actually regained full consciousness, and sat up with a shock."I am not sure 'a shock' is correct, because shock in not really a noun. I think it is only a verb or adjective in describing one's state. 'Sat up with a start' or 'Sat up in shock' might work better.
I love all the fairy tale references you used to describe Hope, Alris, and Eric. Really adds some flavor to how Eric feels about his situation. I like how you glimpsed into Alris' mind. She gave a lot of interesting fact about Hope. The fact that is is Egyptian is interesting and I like how you described Alris' reaction: 'She could smell the ancient sun in her veins' It was perfect.
Bloodheart? Now is this like genetic or is this the stone Alris refers to? The way she describes it as a gift, it sounds like maybe a family trait or god-favored trait one maybe born with at random. Anyway, I feel bad for poor lovestruck Eric. I hope Grant is not able to persuade Hope against him. Good chapter ^^ Can't wait to see what happens in the next.
26ScoozQuick corrections:"He stoked Hope’s cool hand, gently and silently"I think you meant 'stroked'.
"And Hope’s eyes remained closed; her chocolate hair spread in a cloud behind her head, waxen complexion and slowed breathing giving her the look of one sleeping fairy tale princess under an evil curse."Just a suggestion because the sentence kind of sounds wierd: 'And Hope's eyes remained closed. Her chocolate hair spread in a cloud behind her head, waxen complexion, and slowed breathing gave her the look of...'
"her way to right grant’s teetering scales"grant's needs to be capitalized.
"he nodded, and all was aright."I think you meant 'alright'.
"Hope felt her eyelids flutter open before she actually regained full consciousness, and sat up with a shock."I am not sure 'a shock' is correct, because shock in not really a noun. I think it is only a verb or adjective in describing one's state. 'Sat up with a start' or 'Sat up in shock' might work better.
I love all the fairy tale references you used to describe Hope, Alris, and Eric. Really adds some flavor to how Eric feels about his situation. I like how you glimpsed into Alris' mind. She gave a lot of interesting fact about Hope. The fact that is is Egyptian is interesting and I like how you described Alris' reaction: 'She could smell the ancient sun in her veins' It was perfect.
Bloodheart? Now is this like genetic or is this the stone Alris refers to? The way she describes it as a gift, it sounds like maybe a family trait or god-favored trait one maybe born with at random. Anyway, I feel bad for poor lovestruck Eric. I hope Grant is not able to persuade Hope against him. Good chapter ^^ Can't wait to see what happens in the next.