for Thoughts Of The Progressing Mind7/2/2006 c1 
136Elliptical Shapes
I like it Tom, it makes sense in that fairy tale way that is so specially yours.
Some of the lines written here are without doubt fantastic, yet I feel you could have done better.
Still, great piece,
Keep writing
Alan.
136Elliptical ShapesI like it Tom, it makes sense in that fairy tale way that is so specially yours.
Some of the lines written here are without doubt fantastic, yet I feel you could have done better.
Still, great piece,
Keep writing
Alan.
4/29/2006 c1 7Androvnicus
Hey, this is a great poem. I like it. Indeed, the progressing mind is dangerous, and it was a helluva way to say that too. Considering the stark stupidity of todays society.
7AndrovnicusHey, this is a great poem. I like it. Indeed, the progressing mind is dangerous, and it was a helluva way to say that too. Considering the stark stupidity of todays society.
1/16/2006 c1 879Moondog Dozier
Excellent word flow once again, Images jump off the page, but even better the concepts and abstractions you put in place also shine through, which is a difficult thing to accomplish.
879Moondog DozierExcellent word flow once again, Images jump off the page, but even better the concepts and abstractions you put in place also shine through, which is a difficult thing to accomplish.
12/13/2005 c1 Fmog
I love your work. Each word has a heavy weight on it, and each line is extremely complex and seeping with emotion.
Congratulations on your publication, too!
-Suchikri
I love your work. Each word has a heavy weight on it, and each line is extremely complex and seeping with emotion.
Congratulations on your publication, too!
-Suchikri
12/8/2005 c1 43NinjaStoryteller
Dangerous is the progressing mind, indeed! There are plenty of times that I have to scold myself for my foolish ambitions and desires... most people don't even realize the effect that their actions have on others.
43NinjaStorytellerDangerous is the progressing mind, indeed! There are plenty of times that I have to scold myself for my foolish ambitions and desires... most people don't even realize the effect that their actions have on others.
9/30/2005 c1 27Moonlight Tigress
interesting poem, although i dont quite understand it right now (its late at night) i think its good!
Dangerous is the progressing mind... theres an interesting line! kinda true too in some ways...
27Moonlight Tigressinteresting poem, although i dont quite understand it right now (its late at night) i think its good!
Dangerous is the progressing mind... theres an interesting line! kinda true too in some ways...
9/2/2005 c1 91SilverFlowersInHerHair
that was amazing. I can relate. Thanks for the review and keep up the good-no great- work!
91SilverFlowersInHerHairthat was amazing. I can relate. Thanks for the review and keep up the good-no great- work!
8/30/2005 c1 24Searching4Truth
Wow, what a great poem! It was so uplifting. The imagery was excellent. Keep writing, you're really good! :-)
24Searching4TruthWow, what a great poem! It was so uplifting. The imagery was excellent. Keep writing, you're really good! :-)
8/26/2005 c1 34thebigbadwolf
empowering and inspiring. like Invictus from an abled person's point of view. :) not really sure if you meant it to mean that though but that's what it was like for me.
34thebigbadwolfempowering and inspiring. like Invictus from an abled person's point of view. :) not really sure if you meant it to mean that though but that's what it was like for me.
8/23/2005 c1 1Clodhopper
The last three lines were my favorites, for sure. And the lines saying "Impossible you say?/Well, so are my ambitions." kudos!
~Mack
1ClodhopperThe last three lines were my favorites, for sure. And the lines saying "Impossible you say?/Well, so are my ambitions." kudos!
~Mack
8/18/2005 c1 addie pray
I liked this. The imagery was beautiful. These lines: so that pigs may fly, and the dirt may speak, dangerous is the progressing mind - were my favourite, brilliant.
I liked this. The imagery was beautiful. These lines: so that pigs may fly, and the dirt may speak, dangerous is the progressing mind - were my favourite, brilliant.
8/17/2005 c1 38CarpeDiem28
This is a great poem. I like it because it's true. My favorite part is "Behold the tower of silver ivory tha tI have built..."
38CarpeDiem28This is a great poem. I like it because it's true. My favorite part is "Behold the tower of silver ivory tha tI have built..."