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9/1/2005 c2 20Pheobe Meryll
Oh! I'm sorry I took so long to finally get to reading this chapter...it's really cute, and I'm beginning to see how they're all interwoven...now, off to the ball!
9/1/2005 c1 9Alteng
Islana sounds like the most fun character out of the bunch of them. The prince and the farm girl, oh my! I like the feisty bit that Ander tried to rescue. She could be fun.
8/26/2005 c1 20Pheobe Meryll
Yes, this was quite...interesting! Hehe I'm not quite sure I know what's going on, but hopefully I'll find out. Onward!
8/25/2005 c2 19Lara Bykirk
Nice. The plot turns just keep coming, don't they? I have just two suggestions. First, a little more description of surroundings would help with the flow of the story and make it a little more vivid. Second, Allie does seem awfully callous. It seems like she would have at least one lapse in her matter-of-fact acceptance of the loss of Charlie. Otherwise, really good.
8/25/2005 c1 Lara Bykirk
So much forbidden love... I wonder how you'll bring all the plots together. Right now they seem flung rather far afeild. They're all really good, though. I just would like a little more background on Charlie and Allie; you said she pulled him out of a well, but that was it.
8/19/2005 c1 11Earthsong12
Hmm, interesting...so there are two princes, Charles and Ander? Are they of the same country? I guess we'll find out! I notice one typo: At the beginning of the Ander section you have "a long rider"; I assume you meant "lone".Great story, update soon!
8/18/2005 c2 82Lady Knight 01
Thought I would keep up my policy of returning reviews to those kind enough to review for me. ^_^

First off, let me say, well done. Well done indeed! You've taken what seems, at the start, a frequently used story idea, and turn it into something extraoridinary and fresh. The characters already stand out, and I find myself falling in love with them. The dialouge is very sharp and clever, and once again, I love the spin you put on things. I look forward to more of the same, so update when you can!
8/18/2005 c2 12Lccorp2

Lord Duffikus:

You write fast, don't you?

I'm a Demon Lord, and causing people pain is part of my job. Though it seems I'm not to be working as of now...

A bit too much talking, and not enough action in this chapter. Should have a balance of both, and on occassion a slight slant to one side is okay, but not to the extent as in this chapter.

Nothing much to say, so moving along to the next work. See you later, just don't end up in one of the bioling pits...
8/17/2005 c1 3the-key-of-the-twilight
Hi there! Thanks for reviewing Lost At Sea! It was greatly appreciated!

Wow! You're an awesome writer with lots of talent! I love your use of words and you must have done some research on princes. It's interesting and I hope to read more! ~the key of the twilight
8/17/2005 c1 RagsMarie
great beginning! All the different peasent girls were a little confusing...but I'm guessing that you will explain them later? good job!
8/17/2005 c1 26Scooz
Wow, this story shifted around quite a bit. But it was good. I love that woman who was kicking Ander's ass. Just pointin out some smaller mistakes:

"I think about this any more, I just can’t"

I was wondering if you meant to put another 'can't' after the first 'I'?

“I jut though your majesty would like to approve of his sons guests the steward sniffed, sounding slightly offended.

Missed the 's' on the just and the quotation mark after 'guest' and before 'the'

but the lapping of slat water into his eyes.

And slat is salt.

Other than those three, I didn't see anything else wrong with this. It was cute/depress/amusing...and so on, lol. I assume we find out what action Prince Charles will be taking in the next chapter to stay with Allie?
8/17/2005 c1 12Lccorp2

Lord Duffikus:

*Crunch crunch crunch* Decent. Not cliched, but it's only the beginning, so it's sorta too early to tell.

Please check your spelling and grammar more throughly. Spotted a few errors which interrupted my flow of reading-I'm not going to tell you where they are, go find them yourself!

Potential. All stories have it, and this one is no exception. Will this one reach its potential?
8/17/2005 c1 5Eidolem
Amazing and interesting. You have developed good characters and I am intrigued by what could happen next.
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