for The Contract II10/26/2009 c1 Last Wish
It's quite sad that you have to remove the story. I came back onto fictionpress hoping to read the stories again I guess it's just a piece of my memory now :( Good luck on getting it published! I will definitely support you (:
It's quite sad that you have to remove the story. I came back onto fictionpress hoping to read the stories again I guess it's just a piece of my memory now :( Good luck on getting it published! I will definitely support you (:
10/19/2009 c25 
3CynicalRomantic09
I luckily got to read these before you took them down. I thought they were fascinating stories and extremely well-written.
It sucks that you've been plagiarized. This site is getting worse and worse with it and it's completely unfair to the authors who are aspiring writers that want feedback on their work. It just really sucks is all.
I just wanted to say that I read The Contract and The Contract II and loved both of them. It wasn't a typical "romance" story and it was highly refreshing. So I hope that being plagiarized doesn't stop you from writing altogether because that would be a shame. Hopefully you get published some day because your stuff is enjoyable.
So kudos for your stories and for taking a stand against the plagiarists out there. It really is awful that the only way authors on this site can retaliate is to remove their work. Pretty soon, fictionpress is going to have little to zero credible writers because they're all being chased away.
3CynicalRomantic09I luckily got to read these before you took them down. I thought they were fascinating stories and extremely well-written.
It sucks that you've been plagiarized. This site is getting worse and worse with it and it's completely unfair to the authors who are aspiring writers that want feedback on their work. It just really sucks is all.
I just wanted to say that I read The Contract and The Contract II and loved both of them. It wasn't a typical "romance" story and it was highly refreshing. So I hope that being plagiarized doesn't stop you from writing altogether because that would be a shame. Hopefully you get published some day because your stuff is enjoyable.
So kudos for your stories and for taking a stand against the plagiarists out there. It really is awful that the only way authors on this site can retaliate is to remove their work. Pretty soon, fictionpress is going to have little to zero credible writers because they're all being chased away.
6/4/2009 c25 Evelyn123
ur story is screwed up just so u know it makes no sense watsoever
ur story is screwed up just so u know it makes no sense watsoever
6/4/2009 c17 people.are.strange
I don't understand what happened.. I was half through this story and now its gone? =/ Talk about bad luck. I hope you bring it back I need to finish it.
I don't understand what happened.. I was half through this story and now its gone? =/ Talk about bad luck. I hope you bring it back I need to finish it.
5/31/2009 c25 Soggie
I know I've reviewed this before, but I'd like to tell you that, seriously, I have read this sequel many, many times; at least five. I know you're like 'wow what a weirdo...' but this is the best story I have- dare I say it- ever read.
I know I've reviewed this before, but I'd like to tell you that, seriously, I have read this sequel many, many times; at least five. I know you're like 'wow what a weirdo...' but this is the best story I have- dare I say it- ever read.
5/10/2009 c25 Destination
It's amazing that of all the stories on fictionpress, yours annoy, sadden and make me happy. Example A - I just happen to be reading The Contract and just happen to be bawling my eyes out. And my brother happens to be looking at me with a you're-so-wierd look on his face.
So, you know, thanks for writing a story that totally embarassed me yet made me so happy.
-Jilli
It's amazing that of all the stories on fictionpress, yours annoy, sadden and make me happy. Example A - I just happen to be reading The Contract and just happen to be bawling my eyes out. And my brother happens to be looking at me with a you're-so-wierd look on his face.
So, you know, thanks for writing a story that totally embarassed me yet made me so happy.
-Jilli
4/25/2009 c25 cheergurl12
OMG LEGIT THE BEST STORY I HAVE EVER READ ON FICTION PRESS :D you have such a great story plot thats differnt from anything ive ever read! (: so theres going to be a #4?
OMG LEGIT THE BEST STORY I HAVE EVER READ ON FICTION PRESS :D you have such a great story plot thats differnt from anything ive ever read! (: so theres going to be a #4?
4/20/2009 c12 Guest
Gosh, kat didnt know he was going to say she wasnt bright any other day and was so surprised by it? 'Then again...' is practically used as a complete sentence these days...
She is so obsessed with eyes and comparing lure and solar, and even just a slight action of affection thrown her way makes her act up and think about it. eg solar's kiss goodnight
i think its abit silly how kat ponders on why solar gripped the window sill in her room. and how it was worded in the text (and other sentences) is not really well worded. theres alot of unecessary things in here that attept to make the situation more dramatic when really there is no need. sometimes its so extreme, its unrealistic like kat's thoughts...its weird. she is so inconsistent i mean i get that she is unstable cos of her situation and such but even in a few seconds, she changes her mind, makes me think she is fickle. which i kinda think she is.
character development isnt very good, although story line is.
kat is so annoying in the way that she always dont know what solar/lure means, i mean how naive and ignorant can you get?
i dont find her a very well defined char. she seems to be there soley just to serve as an instrument almost to bind the story together.
she always get so caught up in the moment or what the other person is doing, its frustratingly unrealistic, i mean doesnt she have some control? when talking with lure, she always provokes him by being whiney, if she is so sick of arguing, the natural thing to do is be aloof with lure, and not be so caught up, but she doesnt do this, its almost as if she needs to talk back just to keep the story going. BUT if you the author, did make her aloof and as they say 'above' lure or above the immaturity and stupidness of the argument then that would work too, i mean they can actually work something out. Her problems with him is going on too long, it feels drawn out, the story is suffering as a result. i mean the story can still be as long but just with different direction and not necessarily faster but just not so focused on lure and her fighting, theres already enough of that..
Gosh, kat didnt know he was going to say she wasnt bright any other day and was so surprised by it? 'Then again...' is practically used as a complete sentence these days...
She is so obsessed with eyes and comparing lure and solar, and even just a slight action of affection thrown her way makes her act up and think about it. eg solar's kiss goodnight
i think its abit silly how kat ponders on why solar gripped the window sill in her room. and how it was worded in the text (and other sentences) is not really well worded. theres alot of unecessary things in here that attept to make the situation more dramatic when really there is no need. sometimes its so extreme, its unrealistic like kat's thoughts...its weird. she is so inconsistent i mean i get that she is unstable cos of her situation and such but even in a few seconds, she changes her mind, makes me think she is fickle. which i kinda think she is.
character development isnt very good, although story line is.
kat is so annoying in the way that she always dont know what solar/lure means, i mean how naive and ignorant can you get?
i dont find her a very well defined char. she seems to be there soley just to serve as an instrument almost to bind the story together.
she always get so caught up in the moment or what the other person is doing, its frustratingly unrealistic, i mean doesnt she have some control? when talking with lure, she always provokes him by being whiney, if she is so sick of arguing, the natural thing to do is be aloof with lure, and not be so caught up, but she doesnt do this, its almost as if she needs to talk back just to keep the story going. BUT if you the author, did make her aloof and as they say 'above' lure or above the immaturity and stupidness of the argument then that would work too, i mean they can actually work something out. Her problems with him is going on too long, it feels drawn out, the story is suffering as a result. i mean the story can still be as long but just with different direction and not necessarily faster but just not so focused on lure and her fighting, theres already enough of that..
4/20/2009 c2 Anon
'The ceiling also had a pattern on—wait.
Doorknob?'
when you make her say 'wait-...' like the example above, it seems odd, like not well written. Also there are alot of repitition about things like Lure's eyes in the first contract. i hope there isnt too much in this one cos its irritating cos its too much emphasis and repitition. Also there are some things that are described even though its plainly clear, eg.was wearing headsets, which told me that he was listening to music.
my english teacher always said dont make the reader feel stupid, like he/she cant understand.
'The ceiling also had a pattern on—wait.
Doorknob?'
when you make her say 'wait-...' like the example above, it seems odd, like not well written. Also there are alot of repitition about things like Lure's eyes in the first contract. i hope there isnt too much in this one cos its irritating cos its too much emphasis and repitition. Also there are some things that are described even though its plainly clear, eg.was wearing headsets, which told me that he was listening to music.
my english teacher always said dont make the reader feel stupid, like he/she cant understand.
4/20/2009 c1 Anon
Why would there be room mates in mental institutes? its like putting a knife in the room with the patient...
its annoying how kat keeps asking, 'had i just described lure as sexy?' then saying somethings wrong with her, i mean of course he's sexy so she can just admit it, i mean shes not saying it out loud to anyone. she doesn't need to prove to herself that that she wasnt complimenting him or anything. not like he knows. her thoughts are just not flowing with the story, what with al the questions and that
Why would there be room mates in mental institutes? its like putting a knife in the room with the patient...
its annoying how kat keeps asking, 'had i just described lure as sexy?' then saying somethings wrong with her, i mean of course he's sexy so she can just admit it, i mean shes not saying it out loud to anyone. she doesn't need to prove to herself that that she wasnt complimenting him or anything. not like he knows. her thoughts are just not flowing with the story, what with al the questions and that
4/17/2009 c6 1love and misadventures
Shit... of course something like this would happen. God, Lure's such a douche bag. He's not all sexy and bad like I thought he was in The Contract - now he's just annoying.
Haha, when Felix said, "I'll do it," at first I thought he was saying he'd go have sex in the bushes xD
1love and misadventuresShit... of course something like this would happen. God, Lure's such a douche bag. He's not all sexy and bad like I thought he was in The Contract - now he's just annoying.
Haha, when Felix said, "I'll do it," at first I thought he was saying he'd go have sex in the bushes xD
3/23/2009 c25 Soggie
By the end of this I was, of course, near tears. I felt like screaming 'NO, NO LURE KSDILFAJKLSJ!' But then again I was thinking- 'you can't kill off a main character! It's an unwritten rule!' That calmed me down.
I loved this series so much, I was just so happy with the ending!
My feelings are- if you truly love someone you would forgive them through thick and thin [killing numerous people close to you].
I'm sure you've thought about it, publishing and all, but I truly think you should do it. The shelves need some action like this! I would no doubt buy it!
Good luck! x
By the end of this I was, of course, near tears. I felt like screaming 'NO, NO LURE KSDILFAJKLSJ!' But then again I was thinking- 'you can't kill off a main character! It's an unwritten rule!' That calmed me down.
I loved this series so much, I was just so happy with the ending!
My feelings are- if you truly love someone you would forgive them through thick and thin [killing numerous people close to you].
I'm sure you've thought about it, publishing and all, but I truly think you should do it. The shelves need some action like this! I would no doubt buy it!
Good luck! x
3/15/2009 c25 6sooner or later its over
i thought both books were beyond amazing. defiantly one of the top 10 best story/novel ive read on FP
6sooner or later its overi thought both books were beyond amazing. defiantly one of the top 10 best story/novel ive read on FP