8/27/2005 c1 vague shadow
*takes breath* Whoa, that was a long one...

Um, it was a bit confusing. Mainly becaue of the length and the absence of spaces between differing idea. (You know spaces between different stanzas and such) But that isn't your fault...

As for idea and content wise. A lot was said here. It can tell the persona of the poem was confused, hurt, angry at herself, and somewhat hopeful toward the end.

That also added to the confusion, but at a time like this (in a break up) confusion is unavoidable. I know, believe me...

But other than that, perhaps punctuation can help do the job that format can't really do right now. I would advise going through and seeing if you can add periods here or there (which would help) and things like that.

Don't let it get you down though. ^_^ It will still be a powerful piece, I think. So no worries!

~JESSICA