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8/27/2005 c1 4annicel
Oh, very nice. I love how you describe the difficulty of stepping out of your comfort zone and taking risks. It really is a hard thing to do. Fantastic job conveying that. :o)
8/27/2005 c1 Martin Peterson
Great, there's hidden depth and it deels with an interesting subject.

Just one criticism would be the rhyming of "unsafe" with "grave": they don't rhyme at all and it really spoils the flow of the poem.

Apart from that, very good work.

Matt
8/27/2005 c1 42gremlin-oompaloompa
oh wow i really like this, i think it is just awesome! well done!
8/27/2005 c1 93EvT
I really like how your poems are all inspirational and thoughtful. =) Hm... one suggestion though.

You might want to change "A brave step I took and then saw my ray of light;" to "A brave step I took and then saw my first ray of light;". Just a suggestion, you don't have to change it, but I just thought it would mean more. =)

Yet another great piece by you! =)

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