for Never Too Far Away11/15/2005 c1 
20Pheobe Meryll
Very sweet. The grammar is for the most part good. I just have one suggestion: why don't you make the second half in italics since it's a flashback? Course that's a styalistic thing. I love the theme, it's so sad. Classic.
20Pheobe MeryllVery sweet. The grammar is for the most part good. I just have one suggestion: why don't you make the second half in italics since it's a flashback? Course that's a styalistic thing. I love the theme, it's so sad. Classic.
9/6/2005 c1 31bjw
The beginning - the sunrise and the narrator waking against the stone - was really alluring, great job with that! I love how you entered the story from that angle. Your words flow very nicely; I could see everything happening very clearly...beautiful summary too, keep on writing!:)
31bjwThe beginning - the sunrise and the narrator waking against the stone - was really alluring, great job with that! I love how you entered the story from that angle. Your words flow very nicely; I could see everything happening very clearly...beautiful summary too, keep on writing!:)
8/30/2005 c1 Lily Flower
Wow...this is an awesome prologue...very thought provoking and questioning..yet touching and moving..nice...
Wow...this is an awesome prologue...very thought provoking and questioning..yet touching and moving..nice...