for Absence9/1/2005 c1 
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Wonderful imagery; "so she dances in the fire all day, all night,/Wondering, If she could just breathe her own light"
The rhyming doesn't seem forced, always a plus; towards the end, the rhythm got a bit choppy, but other than that I like it.
Bravo.
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83PrevaricateWonderful imagery; "so she dances in the fire all day, all night,/Wondering, If she could just breathe her own light"
The rhyming doesn't seem forced, always a plus; towards the end, the rhythm got a bit choppy, but other than that I like it.
Bravo.
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