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10/30/2005 c1 191Trinity Joselyn Carter
great job
9/4/2005 c1 Anime Freakizoid
there's only one word to describe this poem of yours: POWERFUL! what's amazing about this poem is that it shows how a lot of dreams we have are so hard to keep following, we might have to give them up. simply powerful and so beautiful, keep writing. your talent will pay off in the future judging by how much its evolved.-anime freakizoid X^_^X
9/4/2005 c1 39Alisha Marie
I really liked this...it's was well woreded.
9/3/2005 c1 47Skivverus
The rhyme and premise are both good, but a more consistent rhythm and trimming off excess syllables would do this piece quite a bit of good, especially the sixth, eleventh, and fifteenth lines. Not a bad start though.
9/3/2005 c1 103Unready
the last line is excellent
9/3/2005 c1 132mizu no kokoro
Wah~ lovely, i especially liked the title, fits the poem perfectly^^

keep writing!
9/3/2005 c1 1k+Faithless Juliet
Its weird about dreams; I think we mourn them when they don't come true, but loosing one dream really only sets up space to form another, I loved it, keep up the good work.

Much love,Juliet.

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