for Breathe9/13/2005 c1 
612simpleplan13
Breath... Breathe
I like how the beginning & end tie together.. nice job.. I think weve all felt this way at some point.. great job
612simpleplan13Breath... Breathe
I like how the beginning & end tie together.. nice job.. I think weve all felt this way at some point.. great job
9/7/2005 c1 25IvyTwine
good. you did a great job on the wording. you used different words then the usuall. in one line you said and itll start the circle al over agian...most would have said cycle...me too. how you said it is different. which is great. you also expressed your emotions. well. you made it so that everyione knew how you were feeling without hitting them over the head with it. you had jsut the right amound. y;ou said how u just cant take it anymore. you gave the point that its getting hard without saying that you hate the pple who do that. that was really good. keep it up
25IvyTwinegood. you did a great job on the wording. you used different words then the usuall. in one line you said and itll start the circle al over agian...most would have said cycle...me too. how you said it is different. which is great. you also expressed your emotions. well. you made it so that everyione knew how you were feeling without hitting them over the head with it. you had jsut the right amound. y;ou said how u just cant take it anymore. you gave the point that its getting hard without saying that you hate the pple who do that. that was really good. keep it up