
9/10/2005 c1
82Twilit Exaggerance
Nice use of questioning to keep the reader focused, and I like the green and jade eyes link. Good structure, and good poetry

Nice use of questioning to keep the reader focused, and I like the green and jade eyes link. Good structure, and good poetry
9/9/2005 c1 Martin Peterson
The images are excellent, though not so keen on the line "Muck squishes between my toes". It paints a lovely picture, I just can't work out what the message is. Maybe that's just me being daft.
Matt
The images are excellent, though not so keen on the line "Muck squishes between my toes". It paints a lovely picture, I just can't work out what the message is. Maybe that's just me being daft.
Matt