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200the big sleep
Quite honestly, this is the best thing you've done, (or, at least the best thing you've posted here). It's fantastic. I love it very much, because it takes it's time. More so than your other works, most of the emotion and feeling behind this is shown through actions, rather than just told outright to the reader. I love the flow of time you put in. There are a few phrases that seemed a little off, but that's simply preference. Any given writer or reader will always find something that isn't quite perfect in a work. But frankly, this entire thing is just plain wonderful. Especially the first six words.
200the big sleepQuite honestly, this is the best thing you've done, (or, at least the best thing you've posted here). It's fantastic. I love it very much, because it takes it's time. More so than your other works, most of the emotion and feeling behind this is shown through actions, rather than just told outright to the reader. I love the flow of time you put in. There are a few phrases that seemed a little off, but that's simply preference. Any given writer or reader will always find something that isn't quite perfect in a work. But frankly, this entire thing is just plain wonderful. Especially the first six words.