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9/25/2005 c1 237classic violet
Very deep and moving. Simply beautiful.

"the teenage moon, changing personalities as often as i had,uncertainly wavered in thesea-dark evening. that virgin diana would never have fallenfor the same trick i had"

Truly beautiful.

But all of it is beautiful. Keep up this amazing work!
9/22/2005 c1 72linaeve
m, pretty imagery. gorgeously done, though i don't care much for the double parentheses - then again, my preference (brackets) don't exactly show up on fpress, so whatever floats your boat, i suppose. other than that i enjoyed it muchly.

second to last stanza is very romeo and juliet-esque. the mention of diana, the moon's changing 'personality', the overall tragedy... nicely written.
9/12/2005 c1 63lackluster
it's so gorgeous. i mean: ! especially the imagery.
9/12/2005 c1 132mizu no kokoro
lovely imagery~~ i can feel and see the whole poem going through in my mind~~ great work!

keep writing!

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