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12/7/2005 c1 20sloppy firsts
loved the last line.

'just kiss me' it made the poem end in such a desperately demanding tone.

good job
10/6/2005 c1 442CeruleanHeart
Awesome poem! I love the metaphors in the third stanza. I don't even know if they were necessarily intentional, but it's kind of like your next life, or your new life, will begin when they kiss you or when the fantasy "catches up with reality." Sweet descriptions! The last two lines are a spectacular ending! Keep it up!
9/23/2005 c1 Kissless Goodbye
Absolutely gorgeous! I adore it! I love this line especially..."

"Breathe easilyI'll take your secrets"

and...

"Sealed it wil be thenUn opened till my new first breathWhere we'll meet again"

And the last line is fab! A nice strong ending. I love it, you should be proud! x
9/19/2005 c1 612simpleplan13
very sweet.. especially the last line
9/13/2005 c1 132OneLastEndeavor
it was very nice. beautifully written and descriptive. great job.

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