for Her Brother11/6/2005 c1 
20Pheobe Meryll
The whole allegorical sense of this story is so beautiful. I love your use of repitition. The whole thing is really wonderful...you're not afraid to twist the words to mean what you want and if never comes out unnatural. definately a favorite.
20Pheobe MeryllThe whole allegorical sense of this story is so beautiful. I love your use of repitition. The whole thing is really wonderful...you're not afraid to twist the words to mean what you want and if never comes out unnatural. definately a favorite.
9/29/2005 c1 17J. N. Laerasyn
You really must tell me some day how you manage to rhyme so well... and make rhythm look like it's easy as cake...
17J. N. LaerasynYou really must tell me some day how you manage to rhyme so well... and make rhythm look like it's easy as cake...
9/16/2005 c1 49Neaera
Hm, the format and the rythm of the poem just remind me of Edgar Allen Poe's 'The Raven'. I really like this, and especially the format and the smoothness of it all. Great job, keep it up!
49NeaeraHm, the format and the rythm of the poem just remind me of Edgar Allen Poe's 'The Raven'. I really like this, and especially the format and the smoothness of it all. Great job, keep it up!
9/14/2005 c1 1k+Faithless Juliet
(Serpent sly in garden lay,watching feet of girl-child play,Brother saw, that bygone daywith sure thrown blade did serpent slay.
-I love that; you really have a way of discribing images and metaphorical emotions in a way that I have never seen before. Keep up the good work.
Much love,Juliet.
1k+Faithless Juliet(Serpent sly in garden lay,watching feet of girl-child play,Brother saw, that bygone daywith sure thrown blade did serpent slay.
-I love that; you really have a way of discribing images and metaphorical emotions in a way that I have never seen before. Keep up the good work.
Much love,Juliet.