for Haunted12/20/2005 c8 
4A. J. Weyler
Woah... That was just, really, wow. I like how you included lyrics in there. Also how she woke up hearing that song. "It was the same song that I had woken up with every morning for the past week. It was about a woman who could not save her love." **Since I cannot succeed, Fiyero, saving you...** I also noticed the way she described her "personalities" was a lot like what you said the last time we talked. Have to go. voice lessons. Talk to ya later!
4A. J. WeylerWoah... That was just, really, wow. I like how you included lyrics in there. Also how she woke up hearing that song. "It was the same song that I had woken up with every morning for the past week. It was about a woman who could not save her love." **Since I cannot succeed, Fiyero, saving you...** I also noticed the way she described her "personalities" was a lot like what you said the last time we talked. Have to go. voice lessons. Talk to ya later!
10/9/2005 c1 5kimberley tiff
Okay, I know I jsut did a review, but one more thing. I read your summary deal where you tell about yourself . . Elly - Elphaba. Fiyero- Fiyero. I'm in love with that musical. You have made me so happy. Ah . .
5kimberley tiffOkay, I know I jsut did a review, but one more thing. I read your summary deal where you tell about yourself . . Elly - Elphaba. Fiyero- Fiyero. I'm in love with that musical. You have made me so happy. Ah . .
10/9/2005 c6 kimberley tiff
I LOVE THIS STORY!
Wow. Okay, now that that's out of my system. I love how you used the name Fiyero. Every time I hear it I'm just like, ohh . . . Fiyero! Because of Wicked. This story is so good, but so sad. I love when they try to hold her back from going into the bathroom. It's like she knew he was in there, which she did, but also she just . . . I don't know, I can't describe it. You're so good at this story! I'm obsessed officially. NICE JOB!
-K.T.
I LOVE THIS STORY!
Wow. Okay, now that that's out of my system. I love how you used the name Fiyero. Every time I hear it I'm just like, ohh . . . Fiyero! Because of Wicked. This story is so good, but so sad. I love when they try to hold her back from going into the bathroom. It's like she knew he was in there, which she did, but also she just . . . I don't know, I can't describe it. You're so good at this story! I'm obsessed officially. NICE JOB!
-K.T.
10/6/2005 c6 6Maquenta
This is kind of confusing at times, but WOW. I am impressed.
work on her thoughts, its really confuseing, and there isn'tmuch sense of the passage of time. has it been on day? a week? a month? i am not really sure.
6MaquentaThis is kind of confusing at times, but WOW. I am impressed.
work on her thoughts, its really confuseing, and there isn'tmuch sense of the passage of time. has it been on day? a week? a month? i am not really sure.
9/18/2005 c2 2CrypticIdentity
Looks interesting so far. I think it's fine the way it is. It was interesting how you interspersed the actual dream with the main character describing it. Keep writing!
-CI
2CrypticIdentityLooks interesting so far. I think it's fine the way it is. It was interesting how you interspersed the actual dream with the main character describing it. Keep writing!
-CI
9/17/2005 c2 2Chitose
Interesting...kinda confusing, but I think you have something good going. The only thing Im having a problem with is that you havent really introduced a conflict yet-you talked about a curse, but haven't actually set it into motion, which i think is a mistake. I like youre writing style :)
2ChitoseInteresting...kinda confusing, but I think you have something good going. The only thing Im having a problem with is that you havent really introduced a conflict yet-you talked about a curse, but haven't actually set it into motion, which i think is a mistake. I like youre writing style :)