for altogether instantaneous3/20/2006 c1 
95beti213
"i loved you like a foreign country" *grins* the wordplay in this is really cool, and also the idea in itself... falling in love with someone who you can't communicate with is really intense. love it.
95beti213"i loved you like a foreign country" *grins* the wordplay in this is really cool, and also the idea in itself... falling in love with someone who you can't communicate with is really intense. love it.
3/17/2006 c1 4Jacqueline Stem
Absolutely love the lines "making maps on the dampness of your skinuntil each rib was home." very cool.
4Jacqueline StemAbsolutely love the lines "making maps on the dampness of your skinuntil each rib was home." very cool.
12/18/2005 c1 20sloppy firsts
this is breathtaking.
'our language barrier becamea matter of translation.' in awe
keep writing
s2 chaos
20sloppy firststhis is breathtaking.
'our language barrier becamea matter of translation.' in awe
keep writing
s2 chaos
12/15/2005 c1 50Chandra-Moon
Wow. This was altogether brilliant writing. Completely genius wordplay and imagery...what a poem! Wonderful job, keep writing (favoriting this).
50Chandra-MoonWow. This was altogether brilliant writing. Completely genius wordplay and imagery...what a poem! Wonderful job, keep writing (favoriting this).
10/15/2005 c1 52Porphyrophobic Grape
Love your style. Simple, but still impactful. Like, lots of meaning and whatnot into each word. Beautiful.
52Porphyrophobic GrapeLove your style. Simple, but still impactful. Like, lots of meaning and whatnot into each word. Beautiful.
9/21/2005 c1 12eighteen hundred
This is a really good piece, in my opinion. The first two stanzas and the last in particular were brilliant. Nice piece.
12eighteen hundredThis is a really good piece, in my opinion. The first two stanzas and the last in particular were brilliant. Nice piece.
9/19/2005 c1 55The Watched
If this is a swansong, then what a magnificent one it is indeed, though we may only hope that this proves not to be.
Where do all the good authors go?
55The WatchedIf this is a swansong, then what a magnificent one it is indeed, though we may only hope that this proves not to be.
Where do all the good authors go?