
11/30/2005 c4
4annicel
Wow... Morgan is awfully intuitive. I like the whole 'broken butterfly' symbolization you did in this chapter. It was an interesting comparison to read. Nice job, chica. 'Looking forward to more. :o)

Wow... Morgan is awfully intuitive. I like the whole 'broken butterfly' symbolization you did in this chapter. It was an interesting comparison to read. Nice job, chica. 'Looking forward to more. :o)
11/30/2005 c1 gsmonks
Good characterisations and scene writing. Also- a compelling story line that draws you right in.
Good characterisations and scene writing. Also- a compelling story line that draws you right in.
11/5/2005 c3
4annicel
OMG! He's deaf? I LOVE these kinds of stories! Which sounds strange... but I really do! lol O! I'm so excited! I'm so, so sorry that it took so long for me to read and review this. Life has been so crazy as of late. Forgive me? Looking forward to more! :o)

OMG! He's deaf? I LOVE these kinds of stories! Which sounds strange... but I really do! lol O! I'm so excited! I'm so, so sorry that it took so long for me to read and review this. Life has been so crazy as of late. Forgive me? Looking forward to more! :o)
9/30/2005 c2 Navee
My gosh, I hate the father already! Keep it coming girl! i can't ait to read what happens next. btw, i'm counting on ur story to keep me going to finnish my short story assignment so don't stop k? =)
My gosh, I hate the father already! Keep it coming girl! i can't ait to read what happens next. btw, i'm counting on ur story to keep me going to finnish my short story assignment so don't stop k? =)
9/24/2005 c2
1SouledChampion
Oh, that's so sad! *sniffle* All that pain and heartache... and an abusive father to top it all off. Correction, an *alcoholic* abusive father. Poor, poor Alynna.
Well, this is definitely going on my Favourites, because I mean really, how could it *not*? Update soon. :)

Oh, that's so sad! *sniffle* All that pain and heartache... and an abusive father to top it all off. Correction, an *alcoholic* abusive father. Poor, poor Alynna.
Well, this is definitely going on my Favourites, because I mean really, how could it *not*? Update soon. :)
9/23/2005 c2
5ChocolateSugar
Wow... this is so good, but so sad. I hate abusing fathers! Please, plesae, please update soon!

Wow... this is so good, but so sad. I hate abusing fathers! Please, plesae, please update soon!
9/23/2005 c2 GracE-IouS
n.i.c.e:Neat, Interesting, Character developement is nicely coming along and you're diffinitelt getting me Enthusiastic bout this story ;-)
n.i.c.e:Neat, Interesting, Character developement is nicely coming along and you're diffinitelt getting me Enthusiastic bout this story ;-)
9/23/2005 c1 GracE-IouS
i like it, will have to read on before saying anything else but awesome prologue =) thumbs up, keep going!
i like it, will have to read on before saying anything else but awesome prologue =) thumbs up, keep going!
9/23/2005 c2 hurt
wow.. that was.. sad.good writing. what a crappy dad. hope things turn out for the better.
post soon
wow.. that was.. sad.good writing. what a crappy dad. hope things turn out for the better.
post soon
9/23/2005 c1 hurt
sounds nice. good.
sounds nice. good.
9/22/2005 c2
4annicel
Ooh... That's so sad! Her dad is such an asshole. It amazes me how horribly parents can treat their children, and your story is a prime example of that abuse. I just hope Alynna (pretty name!) can find someone or something to keep her afloat. She needs to be reminded that there's still some good in the world. -sniffles- Great job. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Ooh... That's so sad! Her dad is such an asshole. It amazes me how horribly parents can treat their children, and your story is a prime example of that abuse. I just hope Alynna (pretty name!) can find someone or something to keep her afloat. She needs to be reminded that there's still some good in the world. -sniffles- Great job. Looking forward to the next chapter.
9/22/2005 c2 Alynna
If the father was right in front of me now, I'd smash him to pieces.
I like the last part, with the portrait. The symbolism of it all...
Now that we know where it all began, do tell us how it began. :)
If the father was right in front of me now, I'd smash him to pieces.
I like the last part, with the portrait. The symbolism of it all...
Now that we know where it all began, do tell us how it began. :)