for The Wind Beneath My Wings12/12/2005 c1 
25The Sage of Story
Aww...
(And, of course, my response was the cliche you were expecting. But I couldn't help it. ^_^)
What an interesting image of an 'angel'...and a sad story. I actually kinda like that song, "Wind Beneath My Wings." Thing is, I think a lot of people go through their lives like this: searching and searching for true love or whatever, while never realizing that it's there all along, and they don't even notice it until it's too late.
Like another sappy song says: "Sometimes the very thing you're looking for is the one thing you can't see."
Good job. I am so reading more of your stuff. :D
25The Sage of StoryAww...
(And, of course, my response was the cliche you were expecting. But I couldn't help it. ^_^)
What an interesting image of an 'angel'...and a sad story. I actually kinda like that song, "Wind Beneath My Wings." Thing is, I think a lot of people go through their lives like this: searching and searching for true love or whatever, while never realizing that it's there all along, and they don't even notice it until it's too late.
Like another sappy song says: "Sometimes the very thing you're looking for is the one thing you can't see."
Good job. I am so reading more of your stuff. :D
12/11/2005 c1 20Pheobe Meryll
This was beautifully written. maybe I was in need of some sappy romance, but I enjoyed it immensly, and didn't find it cliche at all. It's so heartfelt and sweet.
"All of my life, I would have loved to grow in a city" well you started in past tense so shouldn't it be "I longed to grow in a city"?
"there were tears coming down your be-freckled cheeks." 'freckled' is enough.
"I had been Sixteen at the time" - 'I was sixteen'
otherwise your grammar was very very good.Funny, I used the nickname butterfly myself in one of my stories.
anyway, this is really angsty and sweet and I thoroughly enjoyed it. good stuff!
20Pheobe MeryllThis was beautifully written. maybe I was in need of some sappy romance, but I enjoyed it immensly, and didn't find it cliche at all. It's so heartfelt and sweet.
"All of my life, I would have loved to grow in a city" well you started in past tense so shouldn't it be "I longed to grow in a city"?
"there were tears coming down your be-freckled cheeks." 'freckled' is enough.
"I had been Sixteen at the time" - 'I was sixteen'
otherwise your grammar was very very good.Funny, I used the nickname butterfly myself in one of my stories.
anyway, this is really angsty and sweet and I thoroughly enjoyed it. good stuff!