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9/21/2016 c1 Guest
I really liked Chapter 3. The first two were like a darker, edgier play on Beauty and the Beast, but now the story has totally opened up and become its own. Still having the character and plot base from the first two. I recommend it.
9/21/2016 c1 Guest
I dig this story. It's funny and adventurous and I think this young prodigious author will become a wonderful woman around June 2016.
4/16/2015 c22 Guest
Best fiction ever!
7/5/2014 c22 ClassicChoclate
Okay, so I loved the story :P It was absolutely awesome. There were some grammar mistakes, I hope if you have time, you could change those. The last chapter, I didn't really understand, and maybe you could spend some time to change it? Cat and Drake are wonderful characters :D
5/15/2013 c22 save the manatee
Loved this story , esspesially the ending, very unique!
1/7/2013 c3 4R. Ficst
I've read the chapter but I'm afraid you've lost me. There are some good moments with your character interaction, but I'm just not captured. I guess I can't get over how the kidnapping situation has been dealt with and how much to do with the world-building is just left undetailed, unexplained. Bits here and there are hilarious though. "HEALTH FOOD TO ALL" had me laughing, and the section at the end actually played with the sexual tension pretty nicely. I guess I'd just suggest filling out the characters and their situation a little better. Get into more of Cat's thoughts as she goes through everything. You do well with her sudden outrage, and you also do well with her flirty verbal repartee. The story falls apart when you leave it up to the reader to make up excuses for the situation, and rely too heavily on the fallback of -well, he's sexy- to explain away anything between Cat and Drake. The story, writing, and the characters have a lot going for them, but require a heavy edit looking at their character development to fix the story.

I wish you the best of luck with future writing endeavours. I hope you keep writing and reading and improving, and enjoying it all along the way. You definitely have potential and clearly have a lot of passion for it.

Thanks for posting and sharing your work.
1/7/2013 c2 R. Ficst
If you ever come back to edit this story, the character development could use a whole lot of smoothing. Just last chapter Drake was calling her a whore and they were tense over the issue of her kidnapping and his proclaimed ownership. Then suddenly they're having almost tender moments with absolutely no transition, the backstory behind some weird stabbing incident is insufficiently explained (even when suddenly it appears Drake gets the story from her, the reader doesn't).
Suddenly we're back to the issues of her as a piece of property, and then what? We're on a boat?
I'm going to continue for a bit, but if this haphazard storytelling doesn't start to come together, I have a feeling I won't get much further.
1/7/2013 c1 R. Ficst
Wow. Crazy start to a story. I am very curious about how apparently this is not the first time she's been kidnapped with a demon, and what's up with all her father's knowledge about them. And the circumstances of his death, if they are important. I very much dislike Drake at this point, and if he's supposed to be the main love interest, I am very much curious about how he'll go about changing Cat (and the reader)'s mind.

Now on to chapter 2!
11/10/2012 c1 Guest
I like the story good work but it would make it better if he didn't hit he :(
8/28/2012 c22 Kaku-kin
I dont like this story it was to DAMN GOOD. Im very angry the ending wasvery sloppy i wish it woulve continued...
8/28/2012 c22 Nanee-chan
Im upset..but overall it was a wonderful story, but bow i hate life because this fi have to cone to an end.
8/6/2012 c22 Guest
while reading this, in my head i was like,"SHUT THE F UP WITH THE I"M KIDDING, I'M JKING STUFF AND GET ON WITH WHAT REALLY HAPPENED LADY!" ya...i'm like REALLY emotional right now cause i'm a girl and i'm almost 13 and i'm like...i think u get it...ya my period so w.e i'm usualy very nive but these past few days i've just been like, mad at the whole world and typing stuff like this make me feel better... a lil bit thats all so ya.
8/6/2012 c12 Guest
WHY DOES SHE KEEP GETTING LIKE ALMOST RAPPED?!
7/21/2012 c22 Guest
i luv ur story, it's a bit rushed and hard to understand in some parts but apart from that it was really good, i admire you for being able to finish it... And yeah, REALLY good!
:)
6/30/2012 c22 Guest
Cool.
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