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9/28/2005 c1 7insanity by nightfall
this poem is faintly lyrical-reminds me of a song. overall, this is not bad. you might want to change "and then i'll have some kind of an excuse". don't need the "an" since you've already got a "some". "we neither of us have wings to fly". don't know if you should add a "we" here. other than that, it flows. you've incorporated a sense of melancholy well.

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