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1/10/2006 c1 6Anya Tempest
Ha. Excellent work on this one too. (I'm not a stalker, honest, I won;t reveiew any more right now, but this just caught my attention.)

I only noticed one mistake. At one point you switched to the third person, when everything else in in the first person.

" “The question is, are you happier now then when you were with him? The answer, is no. That’s the easiest thing I can tell from you all night. I know,” He said, cutting off the “why” question that was coming, "

Just to give you the context in case you want to correct it.

I really liked this. It was nicely written, and an unusual look at super powers. Great job.
10/22/2005 c1 Aruen
I get it now.. ; . Life insights of late shine brightly through this one. This character almost reminds me of a dirk gently potentiality. Not because he's a detective, I can't really explain why I think that. Anyrate.
9/30/2005 c1 2WacheyP87
I don't know what else to say other than 'this story was pretty good.' Perhaps another chapter, but it's fine the way it is. So...good job!
9/29/2005 c1 25Esquirella
Very cool first chapter!

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