for One More Thing That Went Wrong With My Life6/18/2006 c6 
4bloom obssesed
Write more!i absolutely love ur story! i wanna know wat happens between her and tom!
4bloom obssesedWrite more!i absolutely love ur story! i wanna know wat happens between her and tom!
4/13/2006 c6 13Ann Elizabeth
I'm going to really really try not to make this sound like a flame, because it isn't. I LOVE your plot...but if your story were a body...it would be skin and bones dancing in rollerskates...very thin, very weak, and very outlandish.
Try to put somemore descriptions in your story. I'm not going anywhere with the spelling and grammar...it could be better, but I'd rather read a story that PUTS ME THERE than a story that's perfectly correct. Make it more realistic, that's the goal.
This seems more like a telephone conversation...remember, writers are artists...paint me a picture.
Keep up the good work. It's a labor of love.
13Ann ElizabethI'm going to really really try not to make this sound like a flame, because it isn't. I LOVE your plot...but if your story were a body...it would be skin and bones dancing in rollerskates...very thin, very weak, and very outlandish.
Try to put somemore descriptions in your story. I'm not going anywhere with the spelling and grammar...it could be better, but I'd rather read a story that PUTS ME THERE than a story that's perfectly correct. Make it more realistic, that's the goal.
This seems more like a telephone conversation...remember, writers are artists...paint me a picture.
Keep up the good work. It's a labor of love.
4/2/2006 c6 007blondie
woot! i love this very much, ! so UPDATE, PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ
u better... o i cry :(
woot! i love this very much, ! so UPDATE, PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ
u better... o i cry :(
3/19/2006 c6 cpd3
O! I love your story so far. Its really cute. And actionyish. i love making up words:) anyway, i also love lifehouses song 'you and me' it is really pretty and deep.
O! I love your story so far. Its really cute. And actionyish. i love making up words:) anyway, i also love lifehouses song 'you and me' it is really pretty and deep.
1/12/2006 c1 Michael J. Caboose
ok so where to begin. lets see... umm yeah its pretty good i like there is an undercover cop, person, guy. Tom. thats cool so ya know i'll keep reading. pce MJ
ok so where to begin. lets see... umm yeah its pretty good i like there is an undercover cop, person, guy. Tom. thats cool so ya know i'll keep reading. pce MJ
11/25/2005 c6 the death of happness
THIS IS HOT STUFF GIRL! OMFG, I LOVE IT!
the romance started *runs around screaming* YEAH! so... is this tom guy hot? i NEED 2 no more bout him, PLEASE tell me more bout him!
OMFG YOUR STORY IS MY FAV STORY ON FICTION PRESS! ADICTION WARNING TO ALL PEOPLE WHO ARE GOING TO READ IT!
UPDATE SOON OR I WILL COME TO YOUR HOUSE, AND FORCE YOU AT GUN POINT!
THIS IS HOT STUFF GIRL! OMFG, I LOVE IT!
the romance started *runs around screaming* YEAH! so... is this tom guy hot? i NEED 2 no more bout him, PLEASE tell me more bout him!
OMFG YOUR STORY IS MY FAV STORY ON FICTION PRESS! ADICTION WARNING TO ALL PEOPLE WHO ARE GOING TO READ IT!
UPDATE SOON OR I WILL COME TO YOUR HOUSE, AND FORCE YOU AT GUN POINT!
11/22/2005 c6 7awaitinglove
love it! i really hope you update soon. I'm surprised youdon't have any more reviews!
7awaitinglovelove it! i really hope you update soon. I'm surprised youdon't have any more reviews!
11/3/2005 c1 136LilLaTLuv
Hello again!
You know me, and I'm e-mailing you and all. And I know you're busy, so I'm not gonna bug you about the story. I just want to try to add you to my favs list. So, here goes nothing. Talk to you later girl, and update this soon, please!
Luv ya,Tashi :)
136LilLaTLuvHello again!
You know me, and I'm e-mailing you and all. And I know you're busy, so I'm not gonna bug you about the story. I just want to try to add you to my favs list. So, here goes nothing. Talk to you later girl, and update this soon, please!
Luv ya,Tashi :)
10/29/2005 c6 136LilLaTLuv
Hey!
Well, I'm sorry it's been put on hold. I hope you get it up soon, seeing as it's Saturday right now. UPDATE SOON! PLEASE?
Luv ya,Tashi :)
136LilLaTLuvHey!
Well, I'm sorry it's been put on hold. I hope you get it up soon, seeing as it's Saturday right now. UPDATE SOON! PLEASE?
Luv ya,Tashi :)
10/21/2005 c5 LilLaTLuv
Hey!
Of course I'll mention you. But I'm glad you fixed everything, and you seemed to be picking up a few reviewers! YEAH! You definitely deserve them. Your writing is phenomanal! UPDATE SOON! PLEASE? I really, really, REALLY love this chappie!
Luv ya,Tashi :)
Hey!
Of course I'll mention you. But I'm glad you fixed everything, and you seemed to be picking up a few reviewers! YEAH! You definitely deserve them. Your writing is phenomanal! UPDATE SOON! PLEASE? I really, really, REALLY love this chappie!
Luv ya,Tashi :)