for Infanta11/7/2005 c1 
18Duck8
Awesome but am paranoid now will talk to you l8r. The shortness of the lines is really good, it lends itself to the style perfectly. Go u :)
18Duck8Awesome but am paranoid now will talk to you l8r. The shortness of the lines is really good, it lends itself to the style perfectly. Go u :)
10/7/2005 c1 124in theory
I really like this Aily, I love practicaly every line is just one word. It's so powerful. Nicely done. xJ
124in theoryI really like this Aily, I love practicaly every line is just one word. It's so powerful. Nicely done. xJ
10/4/2005 c1 11Bee-wytching
More heartfelt writing...you're really good at that! I love the rhythm in it too; successful experiment :)
11Bee-wytchingMore heartfelt writing...you're really good at that! I love the rhythm in it too; successful experiment :)
10/3/2005 c1 20Pheobe Meryll
I love the title "infanta." I never knew it meant voiceless ones. So poignant, in refferences to infants, especially the unborn.
Anyway...very good pome. I like how you ask questions every once in awhile, like "was it real?" only criticism I have is that you sometimes put a comma at the end of a line where you don't need it, like "lost/can't find,/myself inside." Unless you're marking rythem there's no need for a comma.
Keep writing!
20Pheobe MeryllI love the title "infanta." I never knew it meant voiceless ones. So poignant, in refferences to infants, especially the unborn.
Anyway...very good pome. I like how you ask questions every once in awhile, like "was it real?" only criticism I have is that you sometimes put a comma at the end of a line where you don't need it, like "lost/can't find,/myself inside." Unless you're marking rythem there's no need for a comma.
Keep writing!