10/4/2005 c1 4Aldarona Finarfin
First and foremost - read it through and correct the small mistakes grammer/spelling wise. I'm not usually picky about stuff like that, but in poetry it distracts from one of the most vital things: flow! Anywho, I like the idea of the awareness of someone out there for you, but being in that space between not knowing and not having. You could cut out some stuff and make it stronger, but if you didn't it would still be pretty darn good. Good job!
First and foremost - read it through and correct the small mistakes grammer/spelling wise. I'm not usually picky about stuff like that, but in poetry it distracts from one of the most vital things: flow! Anywho, I like the idea of the awareness of someone out there for you, but being in that space between not knowing and not having. You could cut out some stuff and make it stronger, but if you didn't it would still be pretty darn good. Good job!