for fugitive10/6/2005 c1 
94smile persephone
It's undeniably chilling. Amazing diction. At parts, it did read like prose, but prose can be/is poetry. Love the imagery as well, haunting.
94smile persephoneIt's undeniably chilling. Amazing diction. At parts, it did read like prose, but prose can be/is poetry. Love the imagery as well, haunting.
10/5/2005 c1 72linaeve
the diction was undeniably, undeniably poetic - beautiful and evocative as usual. 'heathen vultures', 'jutting, white-haloed edges', 'crimson-steeped': intensely raw. it read, however, a bit like prose; the punctuation and formatting made it seem staccato. which may or may not be a good thing, i suppose it does depend on how you view it.
all in all i can appreciate the art/style of it, though i must say that i identified with and enjoyed your 'previous' style better.
cheers.
72linaevethe diction was undeniably, undeniably poetic - beautiful and evocative as usual. 'heathen vultures', 'jutting, white-haloed edges', 'crimson-steeped': intensely raw. it read, however, a bit like prose; the punctuation and formatting made it seem staccato. which may or may not be a good thing, i suppose it does depend on how you view it.
all in all i can appreciate the art/style of it, though i must say that i identified with and enjoyed your 'previous' style better.
cheers.
10/5/2005 c1 64not sure yet
wow, that was intense, really strong ending too, tons of visual input going on here a bit scrambled, i like it though, muchly interesting, good job
64not sure yetwow, that was intense, really strong ending too, tons of visual input going on here a bit scrambled, i like it though, muchly interesting, good job
10/5/2005 c1 63lackluster
i love how the words just flow disattached yet so very together. poetry like that always makes my head spin(which is a good thing).
gorgeous.
63lacklusteri love how the words just flow disattached yet so very together. poetry like that always makes my head spin(which is a good thing).
gorgeous.
10/5/2005 c1 90poetic abortion
powerful ending. really, I find this gorgeous. there are some lines that are stunning and others that are gorgeous. its a lovely mix and something of an enigma. love it.
~* noelle
90poetic abortionpowerful ending. really, I find this gorgeous. there are some lines that are stunning and others that are gorgeous. its a lovely mix and something of an enigma. love it.
~* noelle
10/5/2005 c1 35Strangerwithnoface
Wow, I really enjoyed that. Rather interesting, good vacabulary as well.Just one thing though O_o if its a poem it should be in verse, not in prose form. Maybe it was while publishing, but either way, heh, it has the flow of a poem in prose form. Good job though, thanks for sharing.
35StrangerwithnofaceWow, I really enjoyed that. Rather interesting, good vacabulary as well.Just one thing though O_o if its a poem it should be in verse, not in prose form. Maybe it was while publishing, but either way, heh, it has the flow of a poem in prose form. Good job though, thanks for sharing.