for Charms and Curses7/17/2011 c3 
4Alex Dark
This is pretty good so far. i think that Shasta is some kind of sorcerer or witch or something. I know the summary said something of the like. If so I am just wondering what that entails.
What can he do?
As for some weird nicknames ...
My uncle is called Worm. We were at a restraunt [with paper tablecloths and crayons.] He got bored and randomly drew a worm. My sister took a picture of it with her phone and we have called him that since. It is a running joke ...
What noise does a worm make? If cats say meow and dogs bark ... then worms make what noise?
He said once it was 'squish' but I am not sure.
-Drake-saline-
4Alex DarkThis is pretty good so far. i think that Shasta is some kind of sorcerer or witch or something. I know the summary said something of the like. If so I am just wondering what that entails.
What can he do?
As for some weird nicknames ...
My uncle is called Worm. We were at a restraunt [with paper tablecloths and crayons.] He got bored and randomly drew a worm. My sister took a picture of it with her phone and we have called him that since. It is a running joke ...
What noise does a worm make? If cats say meow and dogs bark ... then worms make what noise?
He said once it was 'squish' but I am not sure.
-Drake-saline-
7/17/2011 c1 Alex Dark
This seems good enough. I just hope it isn't going to stay like this. If it did [no offense] but it would get boring. Not that this first chapter sucks I just hope that there is more of a plot soon.
Keep up the good work!
-Drake-saline-
This seems good enough. I just hope it isn't going to stay like this. If it did [no offense] but it would get boring. Not that this first chapter sucks I just hope that there is more of a plot soon.
Keep up the good work!
-Drake-saline-
7/17/2011 c33 midnight to dusk
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7/6/2011 c33 3Fragile Daydreamer
You. Are. Killing. Me.
You get up to the point where all the readers are probably salivating over the impending final showdown and possibly the biggest revelation/everything-made-clear chapter/s, and you leave us hanging! So mean!
I don't know whether to cry or try to strangle you...
That being said, you did an awesome job plot-wise. I stayed up most of the night going from chapter to chapter, each time saying, "Just one more..."
Anyway, seriously, do you plan on continuing this? please say you are... the years-long suspense is turning me into a mindless zombie!
3Fragile DaydreamerYou. Are. Killing. Me.
You get up to the point where all the readers are probably salivating over the impending final showdown and possibly the biggest revelation/everything-made-clear chapter/s, and you leave us hanging! So mean!
I don't know whether to cry or try to strangle you...
That being said, you did an awesome job plot-wise. I stayed up most of the night going from chapter to chapter, each time saying, "Just one more..."
Anyway, seriously, do you plan on continuing this? please say you are... the years-long suspense is turning me into a mindless zombie!
7/6/2011 c5 Fragile Daydreamer
Alright, I know the last update of this story was 3 years ago, but hey, i'm reading this now so i get to comment now.
First off, I'm hooked.gonna read this all through the end.
Second, Nikko (both human and cat forms) is SOOO CUUTEE! hahahahaha
anyway, i'm going to continue reading, hoping that the explanations are gonna be good...
Alright, I know the last update of this story was 3 years ago, but hey, i'm reading this now so i get to comment now.
First off, I'm hooked.gonna read this all through the end.
Second, Nikko (both human and cat forms) is SOOO CUUTEE! hahahahaha
anyway, i'm going to continue reading, hoping that the explanations are gonna be good...
7/4/2011 c32 Grace
I love this story sooooo much! Nikko is adorable! I hope you update soon! You're an amazing author! I wish I could write like you could. Haha every time I try and write a story it turns out horrible. Oh well I'm content with reading well written stories such as this. If you need a beta for any story ever I'm more than willing to beta. My email is
I love this story sooooo much! Nikko is adorable! I hope you update soon! You're an amazing author! I wish I could write like you could. Haha every time I try and write a story it turns out horrible. Oh well I'm content with reading well written stories such as this. If you need a beta for any story ever I'm more than willing to beta. My email is
6/23/2011 c33 8Miss perky
I started reading this story yesterday because I liked your story 'My Toaster Thinks I'm Crazy' so much. I loved it. I can't wait until you update again. I think that Shasta and Dawn are an adorable couple. I really liked when Biko started singing My Little Sunshine to Nikko while he was asleep and he started to cry. Can't wait until you update! Wow, I think this is longest review I've written for a while. Just shows how much I love your story. It's amazing!
8Miss perkyI started reading this story yesterday because I liked your story 'My Toaster Thinks I'm Crazy' so much. I loved it. I can't wait until you update again. I think that Shasta and Dawn are an adorable couple. I really liked when Biko started singing My Little Sunshine to Nikko while he was asleep and he started to cry. Can't wait until you update! Wow, I think this is longest review I've written for a while. Just shows how much I love your story. It's amazing!
6/15/2011 c33 Guest
i absolutly love it!
i absolutly love it!
6/12/2011 c33 Anifas
Yoi~ Whoo~ i've been readin this fic 4 like months and i'm really pinning for the continuation~ i really love the voice orb thingy and the dragon and the famaliars... its all so cool~ haha ye even included the classic bottom-less bag~ nicee~ mayb u wanna add a flyin broomstick fer effect~ nah, just kiddin. mayhaps a flyin vacum cleaner would b awesome though... soomethin flyin so they cab get to nepal quicker than climbin... flying carpet or magical portal n stuff... rly luv ur writin style though. And the names. Shasta. Cool. A Nathaniel would be nice. keep it up wid the magic n slash. my fav combination. lookin forward to the next chapt~
Yoi~ Whoo~ i've been readin this fic 4 like months and i'm really pinning for the continuation~ i really love the voice orb thingy and the dragon and the famaliars... its all so cool~ haha ye even included the classic bottom-less bag~ nicee~ mayb u wanna add a flyin broomstick fer effect~ nah, just kiddin. mayhaps a flyin vacum cleaner would b awesome though... soomethin flyin so they cab get to nepal quicker than climbin... flying carpet or magical portal n stuff... rly luv ur writin style though. And the names. Shasta. Cool. A Nathaniel would be nice. keep it up wid the magic n slash. my fav combination. lookin forward to the next chapt~
6/4/2011 c33 24Elennar
I spied the same mistake about the tense switching in the first scene again. While I personally don't like the present tense myself, that isn't something I'm going to call you in on: that's just my preference, not yours, I get that.
But you might want to proof read chapters really, really carefully because the past tense is the default tense for most people (call it conditioning), so I think you keep slipping into it if you're not alert, and the different tenses does put off readers- especially readers who may be amateur writers themselves because we're knit picky like that!
I also liked that Dawn might turn out to be a witch after all, huh? I like that little bit of development because I'm interested in seeing where you take this- knowing you, it'll be great!
ALSO, I see you haven't updated this in over 3 years; is it because you've lost all inspiration for this, or maybe because it's coming along, but really slowly?
Either way, I really hope you come back and finish this because:
-This is a really awesome story! Sure, there might be a few issues here and there, but none of them will take more than minor editing to fix.
-I believe you said somewhere that this story was meant to be 36 chapters long? In that case, you only just have 3 or so chapters left, right?
So you're ALMOST there, and it'd be a pity if you didn't finish after taking it this far!
(Courtesy of the Review Marathon, hosted by the Review Game. Link in my profile!)
24ElennarI spied the same mistake about the tense switching in the first scene again. While I personally don't like the present tense myself, that isn't something I'm going to call you in on: that's just my preference, not yours, I get that.
But you might want to proof read chapters really, really carefully because the past tense is the default tense for most people (call it conditioning), so I think you keep slipping into it if you're not alert, and the different tenses does put off readers- especially readers who may be amateur writers themselves because we're knit picky like that!
I also liked that Dawn might turn out to be a witch after all, huh? I like that little bit of development because I'm interested in seeing where you take this- knowing you, it'll be great!
ALSO, I see you haven't updated this in over 3 years; is it because you've lost all inspiration for this, or maybe because it's coming along, but really slowly?
Either way, I really hope you come back and finish this because:
-This is a really awesome story! Sure, there might be a few issues here and there, but none of them will take more than minor editing to fix.
-I believe you said somewhere that this story was meant to be 36 chapters long? In that case, you only just have 3 or so chapters left, right?
So you're ALMOST there, and it'd be a pity if you didn't finish after taking it this far!
(Courtesy of the Review Marathon, hosted by the Review Game. Link in my profile!)
6/4/2011 c32 Elennar
I really liked Rathius's little monologue about world domination because it was a great way to put in a little humour during a tense moment in the story.
I also liked the revelation of the puppy being Biko- because that's yet another thread to the story.
I really liked Rathius's little monologue about world domination because it was a great way to put in a little humour during a tense moment in the story.
I also liked the revelation of the puppy being Biko- because that's yet another thread to the story.
6/4/2011 c31 Elennar
I didn't like the sudden shift to third person narrative in this chapter becuase it isn't really something you do often in this story, and that breaks the flow.
Also, at one point, you called Dawn "the auburn beauty"- isn't that an adjective used for women? I didn't like it because it's unlikely for someone to call someone else that in their heads.
I didn't like the sudden shift to third person narrative in this chapter becuase it isn't really something you do often in this story, and that breaks the flow.
Also, at one point, you called Dawn "the auburn beauty"- isn't that an adjective used for women? I didn't like it because it's unlikely for someone to call someone else that in their heads.
6/4/2011 c30 Elennar
In the initial scene, I found you switched from past to present tense while narrating- you should really proof read these little things, because they bring down a story's credibility; no matter how well written it may otherwise be.
Ah! I really liked the rather interesting plot point with Justinian actually being Chad- loads of not-so-wholesome drama!
In the initial scene, I found you switched from past to present tense while narrating- you should really proof read these little things, because they bring down a story's credibility; no matter how well written it may otherwise be.
Ah! I really liked the rather interesting plot point with Justinian actually being Chad- loads of not-so-wholesome drama!
6/4/2011 c29 Elennar
I liked the first scene of this chapter a lot- it was written with a really taut writing style.
I found two typos though. When Sashta's admonishing Nikko for being human, he saus, 'suppose' twice instead of 'supposed'.
I liked the first scene of this chapter a lot- it was written with a really taut writing style.
I found two typos though. When Sashta's admonishing Nikko for being human, he saus, 'suppose' twice instead of 'supposed'.
6/4/2011 c28 Elennar
I liked the fact that you made Rhian somewhat of a positive character instead of the slutty-jobless-man whore he was orginally supposed to be; it really helps to have gray characters like that because they add depth to the story.
I didn't like the last scene with Jazz and Tolouse, because it just didn't fit that well into the story; and didn't add anything to it.
I liked the fact that you made Rhian somewhat of a positive character instead of the slutty-jobless-man whore he was orginally supposed to be; it really helps to have gray characters like that because they add depth to the story.
I didn't like the last scene with Jazz and Tolouse, because it just didn't fit that well into the story; and didn't add anything to it.