for Reminiscing The Angels6/26/2006 c1 
74Singing After Dark
wow. question, is this a rap or a song? beautiful. wow wow. like "How the angels flew in our childhood past" and "It just wasn't fair,I only closed my eyes for a momentThen you weren't there.." you're rhyme scheme is rediculously flawless. lovely theme. enjoyable and well-written.
74Singing After Darkwow. question, is this a rap or a song? beautiful. wow wow. like "How the angels flew in our childhood past" and "It just wasn't fair,I only closed my eyes for a momentThen you weren't there.." you're rhyme scheme is rediculously flawless. lovely theme. enjoyable and well-written.
1/18/2006 c1 79Spare Change
Hm, this is rather sad-losing something you're attached to is usually so painful. Sigh. An opinion though: perhaps the first stanza should have been divided into two? From the line, "you know when I see that color". Erm, just a thought. :P
79Spare ChangeHm, this is rather sad-losing something you're attached to is usually so painful. Sigh. An opinion though: perhaps the first stanza should have been divided into two? From the line, "you know when I see that color". Erm, just a thought. :P
1/5/2006 c1 FrozenKiwi
This was amazingly beautiful. You have an exceptional talent... never ever ever stop writing! (As cliche as that sounds, I know, I know, I mean it.) My favourite part was the salmon simile.
This was amazingly beautiful. You have an exceptional talent... never ever ever stop writing! (As cliche as that sounds, I know, I know, I mean it.) My favourite part was the salmon simile.
12/12/2005 c1 5Mizamour
Wow... that was amazing. So beautiful, and sad... really evokes a hauntingly surreal, but still entirely real, atmosphere, both physical and emotional. I love it... wow. You are a great writer! And thanks so much for your reviews of my pieces! :) I hope to put more up soon, when I get more time...ah school! :) Thanks for reviewing! You're on my favorite authors list.
5MizamourWow... that was amazing. So beautiful, and sad... really evokes a hauntingly surreal, but still entirely real, atmosphere, both physical and emotional. I love it... wow. You are a great writer! And thanks so much for your reviews of my pieces! :) I hope to put more up soon, when I get more time...ah school! :) Thanks for reviewing! You're on my favorite authors list.
11/30/2005 c1 78chrnoskitty
Wow, That was an amazing and inspirational poem, I really, really enjoyed it. I'm sorry for who you didn't get a chance to say goodbye to; But I think they already know that you have.So, Keep up the spectacular work!
78chrnoskittyWow, That was an amazing and inspirational poem, I really, really enjoyed it. I'm sorry for who you didn't get a chance to say goodbye to; But I think they already know that you have.So, Keep up the spectacular work!
11/22/2005 c1 12Learah Kaelar
Wow, beautiful and flowing, you have an enormous talent! So...many...metaphors...though...can't quite..understand.
But that happens to me a lot, I'm just stupid. But anyway, great poem, and I love you to PIECES for the AMAZING reviews! *Dances crazily* I'm bizarre, I know, but I absolutely ADORE constructive criticism, and yours were awesome! I'm going to work on those chapters, then!
Thank you so much, and I can't wait to read the rest of your writing, you have such a unique style!
Blessed be!
12Learah KaelarWow, beautiful and flowing, you have an enormous talent! So...many...metaphors...though...can't quite..understand.
But that happens to me a lot, I'm just stupid. But anyway, great poem, and I love you to PIECES for the AMAZING reviews! *Dances crazily* I'm bizarre, I know, but I absolutely ADORE constructive criticism, and yours were awesome! I'm going to work on those chapters, then!
Thank you so much, and I can't wait to read the rest of your writing, you have such a unique style!
Blessed be!
11/8/2005 c1 60Rosanna28
This is really a very beautiful poem! I love how you used the salmon and the little girl! Awesome job!
Much love, Rosanna.
Oh and thanks for your wonderful review bytheway! ^_^
60Rosanna28This is really a very beautiful poem! I love how you used the salmon and the little girl! Awesome job!
Much love, Rosanna.
Oh and thanks for your wonderful review bytheway! ^_^
10/22/2005 c1 612simpleplan13
Its your arms that I yearn...it's
great story and nice descriptions... I love the whole red thing at the end
612simpleplan13Its your arms that I yearn...it's
great story and nice descriptions... I love the whole red thing at the end
10/17/2005 c1 243Manuel Fajar
When Thou haunt me sad with,
Thy green eyed dreamy look,—
All I see are mists through clear tears,
Nothing in my heart feels right then,—
Time becomes shattered glass,
Broken fragments of lust,—
Each sharply piercing into soul,
Jagged red protusions ragged,—
¿How could I a boy know,—
That our kisses were right,—
That I should not have held Thee back,—
That hot love should have coursed entwined?
¿How was I to know then,—
Just how soon I'd lose Thee?
That eternity I'd wander,—
Looking for my Euridice.
(Inspired by Reminiscing The Angels.)
243Manuel FajarWhen Thou haunt me sad with,
Thy green eyed dreamy look,—
All I see are mists through clear tears,
Nothing in my heart feels right then,—
Time becomes shattered glass,
Broken fragments of lust,—
Each sharply piercing into soul,
Jagged red protusions ragged,—
¿How could I a boy know,—
That our kisses were right,—
That I should not have held Thee back,—
That hot love should have coursed entwined?
¿How was I to know then,—
Just how soon I'd lose Thee?
That eternity I'd wander,—
Looking for my Euridice.
(Inspired by Reminiscing The Angels.)
10/17/2005 c1 40Doray
So the penname has changed and this fact did not permit me to recognize you. ^_^
Thanks for your reviews. I appreciate them to pieces! And my eternal gratitude for you still continue to read my work even though I take ages to review in reply.
Your poem was astounding, for it was full of intense emotion and dreamy comparisons. I enjoyed it because the words seemed to hold a pleasant, musical quality in them. Great poem.
~Doray
40DoraySo the penname has changed and this fact did not permit me to recognize you. ^_^
Thanks for your reviews. I appreciate them to pieces! And my eternal gratitude for you still continue to read my work even though I take ages to review in reply.
Your poem was astounding, for it was full of intense emotion and dreamy comparisons. I enjoyed it because the words seemed to hold a pleasant, musical quality in them. Great poem.
~Doray
10/17/2005 c1 87youzi
Interestingly explored piece..I liked the 2nd stanza the most..found the references to the fish (salmon, tuna) very refreshing as a metaphor. Do keep writing =D
87youziInterestingly explored piece..I liked the 2nd stanza the most..found the references to the fish (salmon, tuna) very refreshing as a metaphor. Do keep writing =D
10/15/2005 c1 38CarpeDiem28
Beautiful poem...i am like speechless at the moment. I love the whole salmon concept that you put into here. I love everything about it...the title, the words, everything!
Excellent work! Keep it up!
38CarpeDiem28Beautiful poem...i am like speechless at the moment. I love the whole salmon concept that you put into here. I love everything about it...the title, the words, everything!
Excellent work! Keep it up!