
10/27/2005 c1
35Cool-Ruzz
Hey, thnx for reviewing my work. I really appreaciate it. I love your poetry and songs. Ur really talented and have a way with words. Its like you just let it flow, u know? I admire that. Well, I hope we could be friends becos u've certainly one of my fav authors.

Hey, thnx for reviewing my work. I really appreaciate it. I love your poetry and songs. Ur really talented and have a way with words. Its like you just let it flow, u know? I admire that. Well, I hope we could be friends becos u've certainly one of my fav authors.
10/18/2005 c1
20Pheobe Meryll
I really like the allegorical/metaphorical concept of this poem. A flame was a perfect description of hidden passion...I'm sure most people around here know what you are talking about! Great last two lines, too. The only cc I would offer is in the line "But I saw smoke/More smoke/I tried/But I couldn’t light the candle" perhaps take out one of the "but"s because it gets repititious. Just a suggestion however.

I really like the allegorical/metaphorical concept of this poem. A flame was a perfect description of hidden passion...I'm sure most people around here know what you are talking about! Great last two lines, too. The only cc I would offer is in the line "But I saw smoke/More smoke/I tried/But I couldn’t light the candle" perhaps take out one of the "but"s because it gets repititious. Just a suggestion however.