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12/3/2005 c1 hey maria
"They reflect back the shine in your eyes/Who bleed joy to the floor/And oh, baby, your beautiful smile"

This is gorgeous.
10/25/2005 c1 32The Blind Guardian
I thank you very much for your previous review, it was helpful

Unfortunately, for this piece, I'm not sure of how much help I can be. This id a free-formed poem, and thus anything I say reguarding wording is pretty much a moot point. I am also more of a narative writer/reader, and poems of obscurity (that is, poems that have many metaphors and the like) really don't capture my interest. That is not to say this is bad; quite the opposite, in fact. I got a good sense of imagery and clarity, and I think this was very well-written. I think it captured the october atmosphere (in a lot of the world anyway). So, over all, I think it was a good poem.
10/20/2005 c1 2DarkLord89
i give it twenty times twenty times twenty thousand two thumbs up!

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