for false hope3/10/2006 c1 
39SliversofSilverPain
Woah. Nice twist. I like Greek Gods, but they had a nasty humour sometimes.I love teh imagery of this. Well written indeed
39SliversofSilverPainWoah. Nice twist. I like Greek Gods, but they had a nasty humour sometimes.I love teh imagery of this. Well written indeed
2/24/2006 c1 36bright horizon splash
very beautiful. to be trapped and see a world with so many possibilities, but with no way to get there. the title says it all.
36bright horizon splashvery beautiful. to be trapped and see a world with so many possibilities, but with no way to get there. the title says it all.
12/29/2005 c1 51Kusje
This.. is an interesting piece. it reminds me of a trapped-mind.. and all sorts of things like that.good job. i liked this. thanks for reviewing my work!= ]
51KusjeThis.. is an interesting piece. it reminds me of a trapped-mind.. and all sorts of things like that.good job. i liked this. thanks for reviewing my work!= ]
12/28/2005 c1 36Lotus Bleu
Beautiful. I love the format, and the description is lovely, perfect. I love the ending.
36Lotus BleuBeautiful. I love the format, and the description is lovely, perfect. I love the ending.
12/26/2005 c1 1Changethesubject
oh wow. 'the gods laugh overhead'. fantastic i loved that line. i really liked this poem, it has to be one of the best i've read lately. i liked how it told a story 'and a barb wire fence surrounds me' - nice. when i was reading this i felt that i was the person trying to escape. 'the beast in seclusion' - again, lovely. i liked the rhyme. this was really good and it shall go on my favourite list.
1Changethesubjectoh wow. 'the gods laugh overhead'. fantastic i loved that line. i really liked this poem, it has to be one of the best i've read lately. i liked how it told a story 'and a barb wire fence surrounds me' - nice. when i was reading this i felt that i was the person trying to escape. 'the beast in seclusion' - again, lovely. i liked the rhyme. this was really good and it shall go on my favourite list.
12/26/2005 c1 a lonely september
'The Gods laugh overhead.' wow, that was a great way to end that...'Dewdrops fall between your lipsWetting your dry burnt handsAs your hair becomes dark and deliriousFrom the sun hammeringOn your back' that was incredible. you could just feel those lines so well...'And you’re too intoxicatedFrom your overdose of sun' beautiful.'you weren't meant to fly' damn, that was really powerful.there's so many more incredible lines in this, i just loved this... i really mean it. i liked the second part a little better, but either way, i.loved.this.
'The Gods laugh overhead.' wow, that was a great way to end that...'Dewdrops fall between your lipsWetting your dry burnt handsAs your hair becomes dark and deliriousFrom the sun hammeringOn your back' that was incredible. you could just feel those lines so well...'And you’re too intoxicatedFrom your overdose of sun' beautiful.'you weren't meant to fly' damn, that was really powerful.there's so many more incredible lines in this, i just loved this... i really mean it. i liked the second part a little better, but either way, i.loved.this.
12/25/2005 c1 54ByFireAndMoonlight
This is really cool; I like the imagry and the word choice is really good. thanks for the review by the way. awsome job.
54ByFireAndMoonlightThis is really cool; I like the imagry and the word choice is really good. thanks for the review by the way. awsome job.
12/25/2005 c2 19shattered teardrops
i like this one a lot... so much emotions, being conveyed altogether. Gives a mixed feeling of temporary freedom yet well, too bad it has to end and its ending is a bit painful... "a bit painful" is an understatement.
19shattered teardropsi like this one a lot... so much emotions, being conveyed altogether. Gives a mixed feeling of temporary freedom yet well, too bad it has to end and its ending is a bit painful... "a bit painful" is an understatement.
12/25/2005 c1 shattered teardrops
just the right words for the emotions that you want to convey... I can deeply relate... we all want freedom but sometimes, some people just stop us... -sigh- and we can't do anything about it.
just the right words for the emotions that you want to convey... I can deeply relate... we all want freedom but sometimes, some people just stop us... -sigh- and we can't do anything about it.
12/25/2005 c1 28always gats b y
wow, amazing imagery! i adore the first and the last stanza. wonderful opening and wonderful closing: that's tricky to do. :)
merry christmas!
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28always gats b ywow, amazing imagery! i adore the first and the last stanza. wonderful opening and wonderful closing: that's tricky to do. :)
merry christmas!
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12/25/2005 c1 Mizu Miyamoto
ack! i've had that feeling many a times. I like how your poems relate to everyday life. As usual, keep writing, and have a merry christmas!
ack! i've had that feeling many a times. I like how your poems relate to everyday life. As usual, keep writing, and have a merry christmas!