
10/28/2005 c1
23Nina Elric
I hope you plan on continueing this, because it has yet to live up to your description: Sex sex ans more sex.
Its kinda dry. needs more detail so it can flow a bit more freely. You need to do something to drage the reader in, make the reader-author interaction more intimate.
Anyway, interesting...
~Write on...

I hope you plan on continueing this, because it has yet to live up to your description: Sex sex ans more sex.
Its kinda dry. needs more detail so it can flow a bit more freely. You need to do something to drage the reader in, make the reader-author interaction more intimate.
Anyway, interesting...
~Write on...