for Catharsis3/15/2020 c25 Ria
Even thought Jason turned out to be an evil bastard, I still wished that he ended up with Siobhan.
Even thought Jason turned out to be an evil bastard, I still wished that he ended up with Siobhan.
8/13/2019 c25 
1BitterSweetWriter
Writing from the year 2019 here. I read your story years ago (feels like eons) when i was in high school (i think?) and loved it. I randomly decided to get back on fictionpress to explore and stumbled upon your story again. It was listed among the few favorites i had and decided to reread it. Damn. I forgot how much i loved this story. So incredibly unique and it hooked me like all those years ago.
Rereading as an adult now (more like a baby adult) I discovered and rediscovered things. Back when i first read it i was in disbelief at the plot and ending and just felt ANGRY. Like fuck that guy Jason. And now? Maybe I'm less angry now because while i do still harbor anger towards Jason I actually kind of feel bad for him. Isn't that a little sick? My feelings for shobian (don't hate me if i misspelled it) just are absolutely gut wrenching. I LOVED her. She reminds me so much of myself its crazy. Its weird because i wasn't at all broken up about the fact that Shobian and Jason didn't workout back then but now? Jeez tear out my heart why don't you? I don't know circumstances change and before I hated reading about happy endings and now living in a world where there doesn't seem to be a happy ending in sight i just long for one even if its a story. I think back then I thought Shobian was weak for still missing Jason despite all he did and now I'm just like damn girl me too.
I read this last chapter while listening to Codex by Radiohead and wow chills.
Anyway, you've seemed to retire from writing, which is bittersweet. You mentioned several times that you disliked this story because you felt rushed and would eventually rewrite. Just my opinion but don't change too much if you do miraculously decide to rewrite this (i doubt it but wishful thinking). We're all critics of ourselves but the number of people who commented and read this story prove you're a wonderful writer. I loved how you didn't use too much detail and let us run wild with imagination. I wish i had a physical copy of this story because i think I'll find myself rereading it every so often and i'm a little afraid one day i come on here that your story will be gone. I think your story reveals something to each reader whether we like it or not.
Anyway (again) you're an amazing story teller and you won't see this but just wanted to leave my thoughts.
1BitterSweetWriterWriting from the year 2019 here. I read your story years ago (feels like eons) when i was in high school (i think?) and loved it. I randomly decided to get back on fictionpress to explore and stumbled upon your story again. It was listed among the few favorites i had and decided to reread it. Damn. I forgot how much i loved this story. So incredibly unique and it hooked me like all those years ago.
Rereading as an adult now (more like a baby adult) I discovered and rediscovered things. Back when i first read it i was in disbelief at the plot and ending and just felt ANGRY. Like fuck that guy Jason. And now? Maybe I'm less angry now because while i do still harbor anger towards Jason I actually kind of feel bad for him. Isn't that a little sick? My feelings for shobian (don't hate me if i misspelled it) just are absolutely gut wrenching. I LOVED her. She reminds me so much of myself its crazy. Its weird because i wasn't at all broken up about the fact that Shobian and Jason didn't workout back then but now? Jeez tear out my heart why don't you? I don't know circumstances change and before I hated reading about happy endings and now living in a world where there doesn't seem to be a happy ending in sight i just long for one even if its a story. I think back then I thought Shobian was weak for still missing Jason despite all he did and now I'm just like damn girl me too.
I read this last chapter while listening to Codex by Radiohead and wow chills.
Anyway, you've seemed to retire from writing, which is bittersweet. You mentioned several times that you disliked this story because you felt rushed and would eventually rewrite. Just my opinion but don't change too much if you do miraculously decide to rewrite this (i doubt it but wishful thinking). We're all critics of ourselves but the number of people who commented and read this story prove you're a wonderful writer. I loved how you didn't use too much detail and let us run wild with imagination. I wish i had a physical copy of this story because i think I'll find myself rereading it every so often and i'm a little afraid one day i come on here that your story will be gone. I think your story reveals something to each reader whether we like it or not.
Anyway (again) you're an amazing story teller and you won't see this but just wanted to leave my thoughts.
3/1/2018 c1 Acie
After predator, which I expected to be a light and romantic story, I fell in love with your writing style but still haven't gotten over the heartbreak of losing so many great charterers in such a short time.
The first thing I did when I read the first chapter, was check out the comments. God.
Fucking. Dang. I'm already heartbroken.
Stories like these are rare and I only have select few which I really adore but will never reread. Those would be Horrorscope, Torment and a couple of others all of which absolutely broke my heart.
You're writing style is stunning
After predator, which I expected to be a light and romantic story, I fell in love with your writing style but still haven't gotten over the heartbreak of losing so many great charterers in such a short time.
The first thing I did when I read the first chapter, was check out the comments. God.
Fucking. Dang. I'm already heartbroken.
Stories like these are rare and I only have select few which I really adore but will never reread. Those would be Horrorscope, Torment and a couple of others all of which absolutely broke my heart.
You're writing style is stunning
1/12/2018 c25 chachacha
OH MY GOD. This fanfiction has made me feel more than any blockbuster movie or any other written and publish piece if work ever could. I kept focused on every little little detail about each character, even minor ones. And unlike other stories where characters are given bland qualities just to spice things up, but instead you just forget them after reading them, with YOUR work you mangae to keep us hanging wanting more. There isn't a part of the story, I feel, that has any useless parts, and everything mentioned means something and plays a part in development if characters, which you do an exceptional job at. I love how despite this site being full of romance or smut stiries, you still didn't TOTALLY romance or anything to do with it from your work, while mangaing to portray with a fulfilling/refreshing feel, like when you play with the possibility of true interest between Siobahn and Jason. It keep us windering whether he still felt something for her as they headed to the mountain, or if it was him "playing" her to get her hair/kill her. It even makes us wonder at times if he ever thought of giving her a chance to live. That was heart wrenching and amazing display of your skills which obviously have had much experience in writing, and I'd be happy to reveal that if I ever have a daughter, I'd be willing to name her after your sensible, wonderful, but only human, main Catharsis female character. Lastly, I have read your other works and I'm enchanted to say that I have as much fun reading them, as I did with Catharsis, and I can see your influence in all your writings, which is amazing to know you have your own style that even readers can recognize, one work from another's. You may no longer post but I do hope to read more of your work even if it is no longer on this site, and even more so if you've had it published or printed, which I do not doubt you may have already done so. I will leave my email in, again, the hopes that I may be able to read any of your latests works, but if there is no word of any of your recent works I will understand, but continue to read, over and over, and OVER the the pieces of work you have left on here, which are basically next to godliness.
Wishing you a remarkable 2018, & fruitful writings!
-chachacha
email:
OH MY GOD. This fanfiction has made me feel more than any blockbuster movie or any other written and publish piece if work ever could. I kept focused on every little little detail about each character, even minor ones. And unlike other stories where characters are given bland qualities just to spice things up, but instead you just forget them after reading them, with YOUR work you mangae to keep us hanging wanting more. There isn't a part of the story, I feel, that has any useless parts, and everything mentioned means something and plays a part in development if characters, which you do an exceptional job at. I love how despite this site being full of romance or smut stiries, you still didn't TOTALLY romance or anything to do with it from your work, while mangaing to portray with a fulfilling/refreshing feel, like when you play with the possibility of true interest between Siobahn and Jason. It keep us windering whether he still felt something for her as they headed to the mountain, or if it was him "playing" her to get her hair/kill her. It even makes us wonder at times if he ever thought of giving her a chance to live. That was heart wrenching and amazing display of your skills which obviously have had much experience in writing, and I'd be happy to reveal that if I ever have a daughter, I'd be willing to name her after your sensible, wonderful, but only human, main Catharsis female character. Lastly, I have read your other works and I'm enchanted to say that I have as much fun reading them, as I did with Catharsis, and I can see your influence in all your writings, which is amazing to know you have your own style that even readers can recognize, one work from another's. You may no longer post but I do hope to read more of your work even if it is no longer on this site, and even more so if you've had it published or printed, which I do not doubt you may have already done so. I will leave my email in, again, the hopes that I may be able to read any of your latests works, but if there is no word of any of your recent works I will understand, but continue to read, over and over, and OVER the the pieces of work you have left on here, which are basically next to godliness.
Wishing you a remarkable 2018, & fruitful writings!
-chachacha
email:
12/6/2015 c26 Lucykins
Okay, so I finished Predator two days ago, I think - and I had to go and read this one because one heartbreak wasn't enough. It's funny that you've published this story 10 years ago. I really wonder where you are right now in life. I'm praying that one day you'll log on this account and see that silly little people who should be working hard on their homework are instead indulging themselves with your stories. I really hope you're still writing, professionally. You build very strong thriller plots. Yeah, your genre isn't romance fully, but you really know how to build chemistry between your characters. The way the male character touches the girl, their dialogues, the stares, the heat. And you've written this so long ago! Too bad there's no more information on you, there's no way to reach you. I really want to know if you're still writing, I'd gladly pay money for published work, especially if it's as dark and thrilling as the two I had read.
Now for the review itself: The story isn't perfect, but that's what i love about it. It's built better than Predator (but predator's mystery is one of the things I loved about it-even if I was frustrated and confused most of the time). I think the thing that bothered me the most are the reactions of your characters towards one another. Both your heroines (Angel and Siobhan) have such short tempers, and Jason, and Cancer, and the girls. Every conversation Jason and Siobhan had, had ended in a fight. Also, the entire last part of this story, her "kidnapping" and escape, was so brief and seemed like you wrote it halfheartedly. Which is completely opposite from the rest of the story. Another thing that bothered me is of course, the ending. Not because of the way it ended but mostly because of the aftermath regarding Siobhan. I mean, you've built a character that I liked, and wrote a story around her, she was hurt and "ran" from home to catch a break, only for it to backfire so badly that it would probably leave her 10 times more broken than she was. That's sad, because while I don't mind bad endings, I still want the main character not to suffer so much, because all in all, the reader is meant to care and root for her. Know what I mean?
I really liked that you knew how to plant those little clues about Jason's identity and his intentions. The way he talked about her hair resembling Celine's, and Lani's eyes. The burial that he never got to give his sister it was so satisfying when everything clicked in the end. Also, what I love most about your stories (both of them). Is the surrounding atmosphere and background scenes. The teenager and their dark lives, school and lessons, the passages, the nights, the lighthouse and the beach, the roofs and all those little places that enriches the imagination and makes you want to crawl into the story and sit with them at the canteen or go to their parties, etc.
I was really hoping to read a sequel, but that's not going to happen. I guess I'm kind of disappointed because even though I knew Jason would probably end up being the "villain" I was still hoping he'd have a special thing for the heroine, because isn't that what every girl wants? A psychopath longing for her?
Hehe... anyway, again, just like the review for Predator, probably just writing this down to myself. But still, good job. You're awesome.
Okay, so I finished Predator two days ago, I think - and I had to go and read this one because one heartbreak wasn't enough. It's funny that you've published this story 10 years ago. I really wonder where you are right now in life. I'm praying that one day you'll log on this account and see that silly little people who should be working hard on their homework are instead indulging themselves with your stories. I really hope you're still writing, professionally. You build very strong thriller plots. Yeah, your genre isn't romance fully, but you really know how to build chemistry between your characters. The way the male character touches the girl, their dialogues, the stares, the heat. And you've written this so long ago! Too bad there's no more information on you, there's no way to reach you. I really want to know if you're still writing, I'd gladly pay money for published work, especially if it's as dark and thrilling as the two I had read.
Now for the review itself: The story isn't perfect, but that's what i love about it. It's built better than Predator (but predator's mystery is one of the things I loved about it-even if I was frustrated and confused most of the time). I think the thing that bothered me the most are the reactions of your characters towards one another. Both your heroines (Angel and Siobhan) have such short tempers, and Jason, and Cancer, and the girls. Every conversation Jason and Siobhan had, had ended in a fight. Also, the entire last part of this story, her "kidnapping" and escape, was so brief and seemed like you wrote it halfheartedly. Which is completely opposite from the rest of the story. Another thing that bothered me is of course, the ending. Not because of the way it ended but mostly because of the aftermath regarding Siobhan. I mean, you've built a character that I liked, and wrote a story around her, she was hurt and "ran" from home to catch a break, only for it to backfire so badly that it would probably leave her 10 times more broken than she was. That's sad, because while I don't mind bad endings, I still want the main character not to suffer so much, because all in all, the reader is meant to care and root for her. Know what I mean?
I really liked that you knew how to plant those little clues about Jason's identity and his intentions. The way he talked about her hair resembling Celine's, and Lani's eyes. The burial that he never got to give his sister it was so satisfying when everything clicked in the end. Also, what I love most about your stories (both of them). Is the surrounding atmosphere and background scenes. The teenager and their dark lives, school and lessons, the passages, the nights, the lighthouse and the beach, the roofs and all those little places that enriches the imagination and makes you want to crawl into the story and sit with them at the canteen or go to their parties, etc.
I was really hoping to read a sequel, but that's not going to happen. I guess I'm kind of disappointed because even though I knew Jason would probably end up being the "villain" I was still hoping he'd have a special thing for the heroine, because isn't that what every girl wants? A psychopath longing for her?
Hehe... anyway, again, just like the review for Predator, probably just writing this down to myself. But still, good job. You're awesome.
8/20/2014 c26 ajashire1
I enjoyed this story kept me wanting more. Now to check out your other works.
I enjoyed this story kept me wanting more. Now to check out your other works.
10/15/2013 c26 Dominique Diane
Holy Fuck. I don't know if I want to cry, vomit, giggle or cut my hand, really! (The hand part not really, but yeah...)
Really, this story freak the fuck out of me, I swear the second day I read this (in the Inkara part) I couldn't sleep. I knew that Jason had something to do with all that because it was weird that he knew so many things about the story (even thought is still confusing, if Layrenna was killed by her son and then in one of the first chapters you said that Inkara was daughter of Layrenna while in Chapter 26 you told us Layrenna took her son, Arden, to the red mountain and then he killed her, where did Inkara appear?) and then, after reading the story I realized that Jason said that his sister was the one who inherited the weird shit, he was one to talk I mean, he killed girls to make a mannequin of Celine with their BODY PARTS, I really don't know how to explain that I love this story I'm a weird sadistic way.
Fuck, I always go around writing reviews about how great their stories are and crying because of the romance and shit, but this one was the exception. I didn't cry but I'm still biting my nails, biting my lips, writing at 2:30 am and hearing the sound of rain outside my room with bizarre ideas of people calling me. Your fault. Sorry if I'm not making any sense, it's just that I don't KNOW! And I want to KNOW! I thought Jason was normal, he seemed so perfect and sweet and then you changed all my ideas (the same with , bad,good,badbadbadbad, good). Then he' . And. I.m.m.s.
Please save me from my agony and write a sequel. Also don't mind the orthography, I'm to tired to check it :/
Regards,
Me.
Holy Fuck. I don't know if I want to cry, vomit, giggle or cut my hand, really! (The hand part not really, but yeah...)
Really, this story freak the fuck out of me, I swear the second day I read this (in the Inkara part) I couldn't sleep. I knew that Jason had something to do with all that because it was weird that he knew so many things about the story (even thought is still confusing, if Layrenna was killed by her son and then in one of the first chapters you said that Inkara was daughter of Layrenna while in Chapter 26 you told us Layrenna took her son, Arden, to the red mountain and then he killed her, where did Inkara appear?) and then, after reading the story I realized that Jason said that his sister was the one who inherited the weird shit, he was one to talk I mean, he killed girls to make a mannequin of Celine with their BODY PARTS, I really don't know how to explain that I love this story I'm a weird sadistic way.
Fuck, I always go around writing reviews about how great their stories are and crying because of the romance and shit, but this one was the exception. I didn't cry but I'm still biting my nails, biting my lips, writing at 2:30 am and hearing the sound of rain outside my room with bizarre ideas of people calling me. Your fault. Sorry if I'm not making any sense, it's just that I don't KNOW! And I want to KNOW! I thought Jason was normal, he seemed so perfect and sweet and then you changed all my ideas (the same with , bad,good,badbadbadbad, good). Then he' . And. I.m.m.s.
Please save me from my agony and write a sequel. Also don't mind the orthography, I'm to tired to check it :/
Regards,
Me.
2/3/2013 c1 4whatthegreencarrot
It was a good start to the chapter, but one thing kept distracting me from everything else, so this review isn't going to be the five-paragraph glory I usually type out (and no, I'm not kidding, five paragraphs is the norm for me).
You kept writing, "I cocked my head," every few sentences or so, which annoyed me to no end. How many times can a person cock her head? You could use some variation—for example, "I tipped my head to the side." Don't get me wrong, I use the head-cock phrase every now and then, but it's just like a... It's pretty much an "I cocked my head" explosion. Sorry, it was bugging me, and I just had to let it all out.
On a brighter, happier note, your grammar was quite nice, as was your punctuation. It irritates me to no end when people miss their commas like crazy, but you seem to be doing just fine with all that. Thank god for that *phew* seeing as most authors on FP nowadays don't have perfect punctuation and grammar...
Ugh. One more paragraph till I reach my norm... But no, I feel a bit too lazy for that. Okay, this is a wrap. Good story, but please, correct the head-cocking thing. Please.
4whatthegreencarrotIt was a good start to the chapter, but one thing kept distracting me from everything else, so this review isn't going to be the five-paragraph glory I usually type out (and no, I'm not kidding, five paragraphs is the norm for me).
You kept writing, "I cocked my head," every few sentences or so, which annoyed me to no end. How many times can a person cock her head? You could use some variation—for example, "I tipped my head to the side." Don't get me wrong, I use the head-cock phrase every now and then, but it's just like a... It's pretty much an "I cocked my head" explosion. Sorry, it was bugging me, and I just had to let it all out.
On a brighter, happier note, your grammar was quite nice, as was your punctuation. It irritates me to no end when people miss their commas like crazy, but you seem to be doing just fine with all that. Thank god for that *phew* seeing as most authors on FP nowadays don't have perfect punctuation and grammar...
Ugh. One more paragraph till I reach my norm... But no, I feel a bit too lazy for that. Okay, this is a wrap. Good story, but please, correct the head-cocking thing. Please.
9/10/2012 c26 Aeris.Lockheart507
This story is one of the best I've read so far! It kept me captivated for hours! Lol I actually fin. reading it in a day n I hv exams atm x_X..
This story is one of the best I've read so far! It kept me captivated for hours! Lol I actually fin. reading it in a day n I hv exams atm x_X..
8/30/2012 c26 A.N.D
I strarted laughing and crying at the same time when I read that it was Jason all along, and I really didn't suspect it at the least. Heck it didn't even cross my mind. I can honestly can say I loved this story and it was probably one of my favorite ones I have read so far.
I also can't believe that he went and killed Lani even though they had been friend since they were little, and how he was just going to kill Siobhan just like that. I thought that he actually really cared for her. I really didn't think that he only wanted her for her hair and skin. Well that was until he kinda cut her hair off and told her he was going to kill her and use her skin to recreate Celine...
I strarted laughing and crying at the same time when I read that it was Jason all along, and I really didn't suspect it at the least. Heck it didn't even cross my mind. I can honestly can say I loved this story and it was probably one of my favorite ones I have read so far.
I also can't believe that he went and killed Lani even though they had been friend since they were little, and how he was just going to kill Siobhan just like that. I thought that he actually really cared for her. I really didn't think that he only wanted her for her hair and skin. Well that was until he kinda cut her hair off and told her he was going to kill her and use her skin to recreate Celine...
7/10/2012 c25 DA-chen1
Great ending of the story! :-)
I love it, how she is in his room and is thinking about him! I liked him, nonetheless.. he is a freak and sometimes he was really one, as a person, to her.. but his character was very deep and interesting to read about!
I really appreciate that your story is on fp!
Mira
Great ending of the story! :-)
I love it, how she is in his room and is thinking about him! I liked him, nonetheless.. he is a freak and sometimes he was really one, as a person, to her.. but his character was very deep and interesting to read about!
I really appreciate that your story is on fp!
Mira
7/10/2012 c23 DA-chen1
Wow, he is weird! :-/ I believe, his father is the bigger freak here, to say nothing about an ill-mental son and a crazy mother...! He gets all of them in danger!
Mira
Wow, he is weird! :-/ I believe, his father is the bigger freak here, to say nothing about an ill-mental son and a crazy mother...! He gets all of them in danger!
Mira