for All The Way11/18/2005 c1 Animequirk
My god that was freakin awesome. The details were extrodinary (yay watch me mess up another word!) I could clearly see where you were and how you were feeling. Your writing style has also improved, tis awesome. Great job, if there shall be, I can't wait for an update!
My god that was freakin awesome. The details were extrodinary (yay watch me mess up another word!) I could clearly see where you were and how you were feeling. Your writing style has also improved, tis awesome. Great job, if there shall be, I can't wait for an update!
11/7/2005 c1 
34Iris Devine
very good! the writing is clear and poignant. either that or the fact that I'm in the cold basement sent shivers down my spine.
I liked how you used "but I suppose it's too late for that now" as a motif throughout. I wish you would find a way to work it into paragraphs three and four. I missed it there.
The concept of your story isn't necessarily an original one and doesn't necessarily have a new spin on it, but your writing style makes up for that.
you rock.
34Iris Devinevery good! the writing is clear and poignant. either that or the fact that I'm in the cold basement sent shivers down my spine.
I liked how you used "but I suppose it's too late for that now" as a motif throughout. I wish you would find a way to work it into paragraphs three and four. I missed it there.
The concept of your story isn't necessarily an original one and doesn't necessarily have a new spin on it, but your writing style makes up for that.
you rock.
11/5/2005 c1 mrs.shigwa.cobain
that was beautiful... I can't think of any other way to describe it.
that was beautiful... I can't think of any other way to describe it.