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9/27/2008 c1 ShadowedAcolyte
Gorgeous. A brief snapshot of an amazing nature scene, suddenly turned deep and refreshing with an extended thought. I love it. If it were on DA, I'd fav it.
12/5/2005 c1 11les petits bateaux
Your descriptions are just wonderfully vivid, and your the 2nd paragraph is just an opinion, yet, it somehow is true. Very well done.

~~Trinity
11/11/2005 c1 95beti213
I love the bit about the pale undersides of leaves-I could see that perfectly... "Cattails in patches shed white fluff made of wishes and dreams" could be so much more... first, verb choice: "made of" is kind of ambiguous, and then, you could add a bunch more meaning by omitting "wishes and dreams" and trying to find another way to describe the effect without either of those words. It's a good exercise as a writer as well.I love the last lines... gorgeous-great ending line :)
11/3/2005 c1 Ajna
Beautiful. Gorgeous. Amazing... There are not enough words to describe this. As I read the last part,I could feel myself smiling. Wonderful poem, I absolutely love it.

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