for Should I Try Again11/4/2005 c1 
2Lyrabird
thats so good. it reminded me of climbing trees. when i read that i got a really nice image in my mind. it was sad but it was good!~lyrabird
2Lyrabirdthats so good. it reminded me of climbing trees. when i read that i got a really nice image in my mind. it was sad but it was good!~lyrabird
11/4/2005 c1 Winter Reflections
i feel like this a lot. very well written, i like free verse, it is a stream of conscience.
anyway, i love it, keep writing!
Claire
(r&r me sometime)
i feel like this a lot. very well written, i like free verse, it is a stream of conscience.
anyway, i love it, keep writing!
Claire
(r&r me sometime)
11/4/2005 c1 27GC Age
Rating system
Expression of feeling- 14/20
Word choice- 11/15
Form/rhyme- 5/10
Figurative language use- 6 /10
Theme/originality- 4/5
Problems
Expression of feeling- Ok, yet you go back on yourself a lot which in this poem is very ineffective and takes away from the heart of it.
Word choice- Not bad, it is told in simple every day language and it works here.
Form/rhyme- very clumsy, it just does not flow.
Figurative language use- Not bad yet some more would not hurt.
Theme/originality- Good theme.
Additional comments- This is an ok poem but your flow is a bit off.
Total rank- 40/60
Note: I rate harshly and only the poems deserving to be remembered are rated 50 or higher. Any poem rated 55 to 60 I consider great, meaning they should be applied for publication.
This poem has been officially rated by G.C. ICE
27GC AgeRating system
Expression of feeling- 14/20
Word choice- 11/15
Form/rhyme- 5/10
Figurative language use- 6 /10
Theme/originality- 4/5
Problems
Expression of feeling- Ok, yet you go back on yourself a lot which in this poem is very ineffective and takes away from the heart of it.
Word choice- Not bad, it is told in simple every day language and it works here.
Form/rhyme- very clumsy, it just does not flow.
Figurative language use- Not bad yet some more would not hurt.
Theme/originality- Good theme.
Additional comments- This is an ok poem but your flow is a bit off.
Total rank- 40/60
Note: I rate harshly and only the poems deserving to be remembered are rated 50 or higher. Any poem rated 55 to 60 I consider great, meaning they should be applied for publication.
This poem has been officially rated by G.C. ICE
11/4/2005 c1 4explosionsss
Very Nice. i can relate.
"I guess I’m just too much
Nothing wants to hold me up"
I really love these two lines!
Good job!
-rezie
4explosionsssVery Nice. i can relate.
"I guess I’m just too much
Nothing wants to hold me up"
I really love these two lines!
Good job!
-rezie
11/4/2005 c1 56from beneath the bell jar
I really like this poem. It kind of just hints at an inner meaning(s) which you can take as you will. I love the last line.
56from beneath the bell jarI really like this poem. It kind of just hints at an inner meaning(s) which you can take as you will. I love the last line.