for Sundown5/8/2007 c1 
2Maline Elensar
really touching i know i say this to a lot of people but you have a knack for poetry
2Maline Elensarreally touching i know i say this to a lot of people but you have a knack for poetry
3/12/2007 c1 174a silenced revolution
Yeah, rhyming's a little forced it seems to me, but overall, great! Touching, emotional, with powerful ending. Keep it up!
~Hazellin
174a silenced revolutionYeah, rhyming's a little forced it seems to me, but overall, great! Touching, emotional, with powerful ending. Keep it up!
~Hazellin
12/8/2005 c1 104FunkyFlower
this is good tho u should definitely work on the rhyming...seems restricting and a little forced. otherwise, the ending is fantastic and overall, u've got a good style. improve and it'll be even better! great job!
~mez~
104FunkyFlowerthis is good tho u should definitely work on the rhyming...seems restricting and a little forced. otherwise, the ending is fantastic and overall, u've got a good style. improve and it'll be even better! great job!
~mez~
11/16/2005 c1 124in theory
Really sad and emotional, it's quite touching. The rhyme is a little restricting though, you could consider trying it without the rhyme? Nice work :D
124in theoryReally sad and emotional, it's quite touching. The rhyme is a little restricting though, you could consider trying it without the rhyme? Nice work :D
11/15/2005 c1 61Wingless Cherub
The last line left me breathless; very beautiful. Touching. I really like this.
61Wingless CherubThe last line left me breathless; very beautiful. Touching. I really like this.
11/6/2005 c1 1k+Faithless Juliet
Deep, and well-detailed; I'm sorry, I have nothing else to say.
Juliet.
1k+Faithless JulietDeep, and well-detailed; I'm sorry, I have nothing else to say.
Juliet.