for Samantha10/4/2006 c8 Kayla Cooper
im not sure what i think after reading the 8 chapters it was differnt i enjyed it.
im not sure what i think after reading the 8 chapters it was differnt i enjyed it.
9/26/2006 c7 D
You need to replace the word "deftly" in a lot of places. You use it far too often, and it certainly isn't the right word to use most of the time. Repeatitiveness can be used well in sentence structure, but when you just rehash the same word again and again, it doesn't distinguish one part of the story from the other. Lastly, it, technically, does fit, but isn't utilized in the same manner you use it in. Instead of doing something "deftly," you could say that something was done with "deft hands," etc. Just something to think about.
You need to replace the word "deftly" in a lot of places. You use it far too often, and it certainly isn't the right word to use most of the time. Repeatitiveness can be used well in sentence structure, but when you just rehash the same word again and again, it doesn't distinguish one part of the story from the other. Lastly, it, technically, does fit, but isn't utilized in the same manner you use it in. Instead of doing something "deftly," you could say that something was done with "deft hands," etc. Just something to think about.
9/23/2006 c6 
1Secret-Lives
Can't wait to see where your going to take this... I hope that you keep all three guys! It's like a dream come true.. haha
1Secret-LivesCan't wait to see where your going to take this... I hope that you keep all three guys! It's like a dream come true.. haha
9/22/2006 c7 bianca08
this is so great you finally updated! i must say i really enjoy reading ur story especially cause its got a great balance between sex scenes and a plot narrative...can t wait till u update again...reli liking sam's interaction with the guys...keep up the great work! cheers...
this is so great you finally updated! i must say i really enjoy reading ur story especially cause its got a great balance between sex scenes and a plot narrative...can t wait till u update again...reli liking sam's interaction with the guys...keep up the great work! cheers...
9/20/2006 c6 reader
I just wanted to let you know that I think you may have made a mistake. In chapter 6, the third line, Sam asks, "Where's Josh?" Did you mean Rick? She watched Elliot walk away and Josh is still there. Rick was the one who left without any indication that he was leaving. I just thought I'd point it out so you could fix it if you want. I was a little confused when I read that. I had to do a double take, especially since the flashbacks break up any 'present time' continuous flow. So... yeah. Have a wounderful day (hopefully writing a new chapter).
I just wanted to let you know that I think you may have made a mistake. In chapter 6, the third line, Sam asks, "Where's Josh?" Did you mean Rick? She watched Elliot walk away and Josh is still there. Rick was the one who left without any indication that he was leaving. I just thought I'd point it out so you could fix it if you want. I was a little confused when I read that. I had to do a double take, especially since the flashbacks break up any 'present time' continuous flow. So... yeah. Have a wounderful day (hopefully writing a new chapter).
9/20/2006 c7 reader
Yay! You're back! I was so happy when I saw this chapter. Please keep writing. I'm still anxious to know exactly what happened to Josh. I really hope Sam can help him out of his shell, as the walk to class kind of indicates (even if it was only bcause he was headed that way). I can't wait for more about Josh and the other guys. I like the banter between Sam, Rick, and Elliot. Will she end up with one, two, or all three permanently? Maybe none at all (gotta tell you though - I don't really go for that option). Anyway, keep up the good work! I love it!
Yay! You're back! I was so happy when I saw this chapter. Please keep writing. I'm still anxious to know exactly what happened to Josh. I really hope Sam can help him out of his shell, as the walk to class kind of indicates (even if it was only bcause he was headed that way). I can't wait for more about Josh and the other guys. I like the banter between Sam, Rick, and Elliot. Will she end up with one, two, or all three permanently? Maybe none at all (gotta tell you though - I don't really go for that option). Anyway, keep up the good work! I love it!
9/20/2006 c7 Victoria
I really like this story so far... I can't wait to see where you take it.
Keep it up
Vicky
I really like this story so far... I can't wait to see where you take it.
Keep it up
Vicky