for Virgin Temptress7/26/2007 c7 
2UnnamedUntamed
Yay a new chapter! I can't wait for the next one - although I think I'll have to reread the rest of the story first - so hope to have something to read soon!
2UnnamedUntamedYay a new chapter! I can't wait for the next one - although I think I'll have to reread the rest of the story first - so hope to have something to read soon!
4/28/2007 c7 fairytale gurl
can't be bothered to sign in. haha but omg good good good godo good good. please update soon and sooner please!
can't be bothered to sign in. haha but omg good good good godo good good. please update soon and sooner please!
12/29/2006 c6 3Fairytale Gurl
omg! this is breathtaking! it's amazing - i love the concept!
but it's been months since an update, please update soon as a belated christmas gift or a new years gift! PLEASE!
3Fairytale Gurlomg! this is breathtaking! it's amazing - i love the concept!
but it's been months since an update, please update soon as a belated christmas gift or a new years gift! PLEASE!
5/14/2006 c6 2UnnamedUntamed
Great!I like how we get to find out what's happening to lye. In the next chapter will we see more of Ellsia?Keep writing!
2UnnamedUntamedGreat!I like how we get to find out what's happening to lye. In the next chapter will we see more of Ellsia?Keep writing!
1/6/2006 c5 3Adaku
This is very nice story.By the way,I also Like to thank you for reviewing my story; The Bridge of Water and Life. And, you also asked what the time era it was. I decided that it's in present day in a village called Adeke Oji(I haven't revealed that part yet, so your lucky.) That is enchanted with supernatual spirits.
3AdakuThis is very nice story.By the way,I also Like to thank you for reviewing my story; The Bridge of Water and Life. And, you also asked what the time era it was. I decided that it's in present day in a village called Adeke Oji(I haven't revealed that part yet, so your lucky.) That is enchanted with supernatual spirits.
12/9/2005 c5 16Islandbreeze
It's interesting to have Ellsia trained for court and I'd like to see some of what goes on at her lessons. But how was it arranged for her to go to Mistess Blerianna? And for how long was she meant to stay there, and when will she debut at court? I'd just like to know some things...it felt like maybe something was missing inbetween this chapter and the last, the jump was a little awkward. But I did like this chapter, and want to find out what happened to disgrace M. Blerianna. Write more soon :) please
16IslandbreezeIt's interesting to have Ellsia trained for court and I'd like to see some of what goes on at her lessons. But how was it arranged for her to go to Mistess Blerianna? And for how long was she meant to stay there, and when will she debut at court? I'd just like to know some things...it felt like maybe something was missing inbetween this chapter and the last, the jump was a little awkward. But I did like this chapter, and want to find out what happened to disgrace M. Blerianna. Write more soon :) please
12/9/2005 c4 Islandbreeze
I like the hints you gave here into Ellsia's life as well as Jessica's, and Ellsia's feelings about her mother and Jessica were well done I thought, since she felt sorry for Jessica but at the same time was bitter about her own mother.
I like the hints you gave here into Ellsia's life as well as Jessica's, and Ellsia's feelings about her mother and Jessica were well done I thought, since she felt sorry for Jessica but at the same time was bitter about her own mother.
12/1/2005 c3 Islandbreeze
The description of Ellsia coming in through the hall was great, it made her beauty seem even more unique by making it seem really young and fresh, which I think goes along with what you're trying to get across in Ellsia.
Why does she hate her father? It's blatantly put, which is fine to let us know...but some examples, or behavoir that indicates that before hand would be good so we sympathize, or at least understand. Making her come down in her night clothes seems a little callous, but not hatred deserving.
I wonder what this new artist has to do with things, he seems a rather interesting character! I like that name Romanin too...sounds romantic. I have a thing with names...cool names you have so far.
About the strained thing, I meant her character, not the writing. Sorry about the confusion!
I liked the chapter, with the hint of the plans in store for Ellsia! Nice work...I want to finish reading, but again with the hw. I will finish what you have posted soon though, promise!
The description of Ellsia coming in through the hall was great, it made her beauty seem even more unique by making it seem really young and fresh, which I think goes along with what you're trying to get across in Ellsia.
Why does she hate her father? It's blatantly put, which is fine to let us know...but some examples, or behavoir that indicates that before hand would be good so we sympathize, or at least understand. Making her come down in her night clothes seems a little callous, but not hatred deserving.
I wonder what this new artist has to do with things, he seems a rather interesting character! I like that name Romanin too...sounds romantic. I have a thing with names...cool names you have so far.
About the strained thing, I meant her character, not the writing. Sorry about the confusion!
I liked the chapter, with the hint of the plans in store for Ellsia! Nice work...I want to finish reading, but again with the hw. I will finish what you have posted soon though, promise!
11/28/2005 c2 Islandbreeze
Ellsia does seem a rather intriguing character. Her relations with other people seem to be a bit strained, but her pledge that she won't be bound to any man kind of sets us up for later.
Deve didn't seem too bad, well...some guys at sixteen :), but I wonder if something else is going to happen involving him? Like his name, btw. And the little poem or mantra at the end was cool also. Nice job, I promist I'll finish reading when I don't have a bajillion hours of hw to do!
Ellsia does seem a rather intriguing character. Her relations with other people seem to be a bit strained, but her pledge that she won't be bound to any man kind of sets us up for later.
Deve didn't seem too bad, well...some guys at sixteen :), but I wonder if something else is going to happen involving him? Like his name, btw. And the little poem or mantra at the end was cool also. Nice job, I promist I'll finish reading when I don't have a bajillion hours of hw to do!
11/28/2005 c1 Islandbreeze
Sorry I'm too lazy to sign in...but I really liked your beginning, and so I decided to review.
The slightly mysterious tone at the beginning really helps to draw you into the story, and you have great description of the woman in the painting. The history behind this should be fascinating, as well as seeing what Ellsia's flaws will turn out to be (yes, I read your profile :). I kind of liked Lye too though so I hope she won't be out of the story forever if you're going into Ellsia's whole story.
I had only two small complaints...Lye's thoughts would be easier to distinguish, and you could cut out all the 'she thoughts' if you put them in italics. Second, some places sound a little choppy, and I think it's from punctuation, so maybe just look that over. But all the description is just lovely, and really brings you into the writing.
Also, Ellsia's full name is beautiful, and I'm interested to find out about the other characters. Nice beginning!
Sorry I'm too lazy to sign in...but I really liked your beginning, and so I decided to review.
The slightly mysterious tone at the beginning really helps to draw you into the story, and you have great description of the woman in the painting. The history behind this should be fascinating, as well as seeing what Ellsia's flaws will turn out to be (yes, I read your profile :). I kind of liked Lye too though so I hope she won't be out of the story forever if you're going into Ellsia's whole story.
I had only two small complaints...Lye's thoughts would be easier to distinguish, and you could cut out all the 'she thoughts' if you put them in italics. Second, some places sound a little choppy, and I think it's from punctuation, so maybe just look that over. But all the description is just lovely, and really brings you into the writing.
Also, Ellsia's full name is beautiful, and I'm interested to find out about the other characters. Nice beginning!
11/21/2005 c1 17Pluck Those Wings
Very intriguing first chapter, I am def. going to have to read on. You've hooked me. :D
17Pluck Those WingsVery intriguing first chapter, I am def. going to have to read on. You've hooked me. :D