
11/17/2005 c1
2I love Honey bunz
-hey! nice story but um the part when the king cuts off his head is kinda um... boring, cause you just made it happen so fast that it wasnt really exciting. you should make that part more longer and more descriptions, also, you said in the beginning that OPHELIA had like black hair, then you say that on the island she lets out her BLOND HAIR. you should really stay on the same hair thing u know...
-bellz :P

-hey! nice story but um the part when the king cuts off his head is kinda um... boring, cause you just made it happen so fast that it wasnt really exciting. you should make that part more longer and more descriptions, also, you said in the beginning that OPHELIA had like black hair, then you say that on the island she lets out her BLOND HAIR. you should really stay on the same hair thing u know...
-bellz :P