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12/19/2005 c1 7gingerbeer
Great idea! You varied the plundering references well: "cutthroats," "liberations," "brigands," "victimizers," "party.."

One thing that took a fourth look from me was "all but empty." I'm pretty sure if you say "all but empty," you mean "very full." However, you continue with "the only spoils..." You might want to take a look at that, but otherwise, great idea!
11/22/2005 c1 163Frosted Midnight
this is very interesting , i like it!
11/18/2005 c1 19J-Kid
Wow! This is beautifully spooky! I love the way it is set up. There are so many good lines in this I can't really pick out a favorite one. Some of the longer sentences feel a bit awkwardly acadamic (the sentence about the ceremonial poinard especially), but I still really like it. The only thing I would change would be the mythril casket part. It feels out of place here, somehow. . . . although I applaud the Tolkien reference itself . . .

By the way, thank you for reviewing my poem "Blind."

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